DEAF | 100 word flash fiction

The internal timer of the fridge would hum, the leaking pipe would hiss and if the washing machine was in use, then the drums would sound louder than the ones in concerts.

Naina’s ears, despite weeks of working in the new rented house, failed to get accustomed to the cacophony that was a daily ritual. Wearing earplugs avoided aggravating her headache.

Her two-year-old daughter crawled  into the room, and tugged at her saree. Naina, was deep in concentration, cutting the vegetables. Thanks to the earplugs, she was deaf to how the baby’s babble “va va” evolved to “Ma Ma”.    

THE END 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[¿]

And right now am wearing earplugs!
Alrighty....jokes apart...This is something reflecting your actual way of writing on the thoughts you actually carry on mind...and that's just great and brave!
How brilliantly this so short para cum story speaks a huge about the annoying surroundings around us...and in case of avoiding that we make an avoidance to the happiness unwillingly!! ...am honest...tis a great read thanks for sharing☺

[Kichu]

This is the power of 100 word flash fiction. It is very challenging but once you get the hang of it... IT is the strongest piece of writing you can conjure. Try a shot at it. Let me know once u do

[¿]

Oh that's gonna be too tough....writing with a limit and presenting in such flawless way...Mine hat's off to you!! I'll try☺

[Kichu]

Please try :)

[¿]

Okay! When time does bit mercy on me😀!!
Will try for sure☺

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad ending. A happy moment missed. Blocked ears make special pass by. Wonderful use of words and thoughts in the short story.
Coyote

[Riddhi]

Ah!!! Actually I never thought that someone can express oneself and write an entire story within so short word limit..You are indeed a talented writer..And actually right now I am also wearing earphones!!! Anyway , I loved the entire thing and the way you expressed the entire thing.The way you expressed various sounds was worth appreciating...Actually I thought it was a perfect example of Onomatopoeia..And we indeed miss happiness in our life by avoiding our surroundings...You wrote it beautifully..And actually for a mother nothing can make her more happy than when her baby first time utters mama for her...And actually she was not being deaf to her surroundings but to the happiness in her life..Loved it...
Keep on writing and well done...

[Manisha Shaw]

Good one. Short n expressive

[Kichu]

Thanks Manisha

[Lyn Anderson]

You have a knack for setting the scene and creating something bigger in the reader's mind, which is what these short stories are supposed to do, opening a door into a world and giving you a glimpse, so you can fill in the before and after ... well done

[Kichu]

Thank you for the supportive words Lyn anderson :)

[barleygirl]

The whole point to these 100-word exercises is to write something so provocative that the reader continues to think about it for a while, before he/she can go on to doing anything else. In this way, you have created a much-longer story than what can be seen in words. I love the way you open with strong amazing comparisons to convey the cacophony of background noise. Becuz the title is “DEAF”, we are wondering is this woman was deaf & perhaps got her hearing back which causes her to be bombarded by sounds she never heard before. My mom is deaf, so I understand this – the way it was whenever mom would have the extreme splurge of getting new hearing aids (we were poor & these were very expensive). For weeks, she commented on each new sound she was noticing. Your final line is so cryptic, tho. It’s a blessing and a curse. You say it like there’s nothing much to the idea, but that line delivers a punch of realization. I also enjoy the way you add touches of your culture, as if we can actually experience this woman’s background & surroundings -- all that is a TON for packing into 100 words!!! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kichu]

Your review has me smiling with delight end to end... Your review is longer than my story :D hehehe... I am sorry to hear your mom had difficulties and this story may have brought some memories up. Could you point out where you spotted the references with my culture? I wanted to make this as culturally neutral as possible. Thats why. :D

[barleygirl]

The word "saree" and the name Naina have a cultural feel . . .

[Kichu]

Oh, I see that now (y)