a cold fall

i use to feel as though i was falling down a rabbit hole of horrors
reaching out in hope only to feel glass shards falling upwards with the wall
 the cold air rushing by my ears were the taunting voices of strangers
but the ice that gathered along my soul and skin where the uncaring curses of my loved ones
 i thought the cold had left me numb
 but this fall had a sick since of false hope
 giving me the feeling i was falling back up
 but that's when i hit the bottom and tasted my blood as i lost a voice that was kind to me
 i hear the faded calls of the last few who stayed by my side until the fall tour us apart and the wind filled my ears
so i stand on thin ground fearing it will give in and my fall might become greater
i must find a way up to the last light of my life so i may pull others from such a dreaded fall
but spears threaten to rip into my flesh if i begin to climb back up
my fear is chaining me down in the false bottom of this pit
even if i could free myself the glass has torn my hands on the fall down
shadows within shadows stir around me i feel the danger of their gaze upon me
and the air hums with their madness just as their whispers are thick with their sickness
i fall to my knees just as ragged wings fold around me
they are my own but will they be strong enough to carry me through
i gaze up to the distant light i can only hope...

Reviews

[Pax]

Dear Friend,

its been long I haven't come by and read one of your piece. And I always find them relateable somehow. It is the feeling that many could relate too, one way or another. We are all fragile soul, easily breakable, vulnerable to life's many great challenges... It is not something we can just live up and stood up then forget. Somehow it marks us depending on the choice we make.

I can see that through the ending of this piece, that hope is a distant away. The very least you heart still hopes for that someday for you to see the clearer day. You know I come to realize that everything is not permanent, that there is no such thing as forever, but that certain moment, that certain feeling will always last... and that is you light, the love you have for yourself and everyone around you. If not everyone atleast you try to love them, and the very least you love your self to keep on hoping, dreaming, staying alive to survive life.

if we do have a cold downfall, then we try again, and try another one until we reach that certain goal we are trying to fulfill, that buttom pit, if there is no ladder we could always find ways to create one or do our everything to climb up again. life never stops by just giving up...

now i think i have said too much :D, but i am glad to have read and could somehow create a good vibe in my review... keep your positive up my friend. All in all i really do like this piece. its dark but there is hope in the end...

[Kiari Sabon]

you didnt go too far i understand what your saying and as always your reviews are inspiring :D thank you Pax it means a lot oh and out of question did you get my message my wifi is being wonky and hasnt been sending everything :/ but thanks and ill hold onto that hope and you may you always find the light my friend :D