what could be?

trying some lighter work in hopes of a new start to life i was told the readers would like lighter work from me so here is my try

i told you of things that i told none other

you shared with me just the same

in hopes of a future i wished upon every star

but clouds block the way and seem to grow thicker every day

and the more they thicked the farther we grow

i wish to scream out and cry

but in this gloom there is a rose bud

and who is to say it will not bloom

to rise through the clouds to a new days sun

and make a new life spun

one of joy,peace,and freedom

 

Reviews

[quarintine_deathangel]

This is lighter, but the concept goes over reall,y heavy, which I find rarely and therefore consider this excellent. The imagery set here is very well written, since it's soft and torturous all at the same time. I enjoyed reading! Thanx for writing ^.^

[Kiari Sabon]

Thank you it means a lot :}

[Chris]

In the city I'ld find you on a porch step
at 3 AM...
setting there watching for the odd car to pass
maybe a smoke burning to ash
but maybe not.

And the look in your eyes
wouldn't be tears...
prolly wouldn't be much of anything more
than we - you and I - always have.
You KNOW the one I'm talking about
that "Hell, ain't nuthin changes no matter any thing at all..."

But you know what?
At least this once...
this very, very one time...
I ...me... I heard you
...and understood.

Chris

[Kiari Sabon]

thank you and i enjoyed reading this

[Chris]

Your reaching out literally brought this from me...right then. And its meant.

[Kiari Sabon]

i loved it and truly thank you Chris

[Mark]

very nice, there is hope in this poem. I liked it. wonder if 'glom' should be 'gloom'?

[Kiari Sabon]

thank you and ill fix it next time im on :}