A Hope In The Hollow

Another 2006 poem when I was in the confines of residential treatment.

 

A HOPE IN THE HOLLOW

03.22.06

-ALLY CAMPANOZZI

 

CHAOS IMPALES ME!

HOW WILL I DECIDE WHEN IT BOILS DOWN?

THERE IS ONLY ONE WHO HAS SAT BY MY SIDE

ETERNALLY: ENTRAPED AND SITUATED

BY ME FOREVER

I AM MEZMERIZED BY ALL THAT HE HAS DONE

FOR ME HERE AND NOW

SEWN UP WITH STITCHES

A HEART OF THE PAIN

A HOPE OF THE HOLLOW

THEN THERE IS THE OTHER GEM

IT BEGINS TO GLISTEN

I SHARE THE DISEASE OF ADDICTION

AND OF FASCINATION TO THE REALM AND CULTURE

OF LIFE IN THE DARKNESS

AND PRISMS WE FACED

IT HAD NO VENTILATION

BECAUSE THEY CANNOT FAIL ME NOW

EITHER OF THESE OPTIONS

COULD EDIFY AND MAKE ME COMPLETE

HERE AND FOR ALWAYS

I MUST INSERT MYSELF ONCE MORE

INTO A DUALITY OF A DOUBLE PASSION

OF HEARTS ON THE LINE

PELLMELL IS SUFFOCATING ME SWEETLY

LIKE SHEETS WHERE I LAY ON THE PRIMAL JOURNEY

IT MADE ME WILD, IT MADE ME SO SAD

SO THEN I FELL APART

 

 

Author's Note

just free verse.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"FOR ME HERE AND NOW

SEWN UP WITH STITCHES

A HEART OF THE PAIN

A HOPE OF THE HOLLOW

THEN THERE IS THE OTHER GEM

BEGINS TO GLISTEN

I SHARE THE DISEASE OF ADDICTION

AND OF FASCINATION TO THE REALM AND CULTURE

OF LIVE IN THE DARKNESS

AND PRISMS WE FACED""

For me you write unique poetry...Bravo.............

[Ziggy Jagger SpiderFromMars]

Thanks so much! I don't really put a lot of thought into it, I just write what comes to me :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Good to know...The natural way ...:)./...............

[Mr. Henley]

"INTO A DUALITY OF A DOUBLE PASSION"
Such beautiful diction. A great piece, Ally.

[Ziggy Jagger SpiderFromMars]

Thank you so much!

[writer max ride]

wow great job. will you be friends with me on here? I would much enjoy it cause I just love to read poetry and you seem to be into it. :)

[Ziggy Jagger SpiderFromMars]

Yes I will totally be your friend on here. Poetry is amazing and I have no friends at all who are into it. Nobody ever wants to hear my poems or anything like that at all, it's very frustrating. I'm excited to get to know you and share poems!

[writer max ride]

okay thanks. :)

[ValyrieKiennan]

Lovely, however the font/colour is distracting. It could put some readers off! Also, be careful to spellcheck. "Entrapped" has two letter P's! Also, while this is free verse, you might want to consider inserting stanzas? You do have differentiating themes/sections, and stanzas might clean up this piece in a meaningful way that adds to your poem, as opposed to taking away from it!

[Ziggy Jagger SpiderFromMars]

Thank you for the feedback, I totally agree with you that the font is distracting and could throw people off. The only reason it's not done in stanzas is that I wrote it just letting everything out not really caring about format but I am going to definitely work on having more order and format in my older poems. Again, I really appreciate the feedback. I am getting my degree in this and I want my poems to be the best they can be.

[ValyrieKiennan]

That is excellent. I write the same way as well; get the ideas out on paper/screen, then go back later!