My love life

My heart is yours, but I want it back,
i've given up on love, but its sprung an attack.
I cant afford to lose anymore,
I still havent recovered from all the sores.
My heart is fragile, but most dont see,
I hide the weakness, below my knees,
I wear long pants and cover the pain,
so she doesnt see, how I need her rain.
The joy of water, the coolness on my hands,
gives me the breath I need and my heart expands.
I've gambled alot, so is this the same? Will I keep playing
and lose the game? I cant. I'd rather die, than have these feelings
take over my life. Lose the friendship, for just a chance?
I have to be sure, before I run into romance.
Why does this happen? Have I not suffered enough?
Life wont leave me alone until im strong and tough.
But that road has long gone, as I know now, my life is a merry-go-round.
The same situation takes my life, but not this time, I'm going on strike.
Do I have the power? Can I resist my love and just take a shower?
Wash her clean from my dreams, and admire from a distance being unable to intervene.
No I cant, its not who I am, and not who I want, to be, for now, I'll just take my bow
and let it be, what shall be.

Reviews

[Nish Nish the Fish]

as i mentioned to you, im like on the verge of tears here!
this was really deep, and it seems like it was ur way of spilling a years worth of emotional sickening roller coasters in one short, sweet, poem.

"Wash her clean from my dreams, and admire from a distance being unable to intervene."
this line struck me because its so powerful, having to get rid of feelings that u have for soemone, and to watch them from a distance, not able to have them for urself, its such a sad thing to feel, and u portrayed it so well using the words you did.
and the very last two lines of the poem were so perfect in the way the ended it.
an exact wrap up, but a thought provoking one indeed.
the reader feels what you feel, and in doing so you've shown a lot of talent and potential in the art of poetry.
well done!

[Khalidak]

well thank you

[Samantha Ashley*]

I like this nice job! It reminds me of one of my poems that I wrote awhile ago but yours is better I think!