Uncomfortable

Stages in your life when you don't think you belong

Alone to be afraid

Shot down by the ones'  who betrayed

If I would have known the outcome;

Before what happened in the first place,

My life would be happy,

Not so alone

Author's Note

Just a small poem, reflections of who we are in a weird place and time

Reviews

[Dave "Doc" Rogers]

I understand the sentiment but not the structure. I thought there was going to be a rhyming scheme but no. But reflections of things past and how beneficial a little foreknowledge would have been... I can relate to that. The older I get the more readily I see schemers.

Thanks for sharing this.

Cheers!
Doc.

[Through the Gateway]

An interesting little poem. I think we've all been there. Some of us are still there. I think the older we get, the more we pause and reflect on the odd times we've experienced, and the odder times we're in.

[Hayame]

Not what I expected but a beautifully executed poem. :)

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I'm always uncomfortable, I'm old. lol But trust everybody a little; none too much, never depend upon another for your own happiness; true happinesss comes from within, you can carry it with you like luggage, only the airline won't lose it for you. lol And being alone is not such a bad thing, being bored is much worse.

[CLUTZ]

does anyone ever feel like thy belong??? mayb its just me.........this is good, it says so much with few words. I liked it.

[fallendemonofmercy]

oh.... there is not a day that passes where i long to go back and make ammends.
beautiful, touching.... what more can i say?
lovely writing - love to read more.

[Mr. Lopez]

Just today i had this same thought " if i knew then...." Betrayal is something that i will never understand but a reality of life, and some wounds feel as if they will never heal. But i still believe that everything happens for a reason. Short ? Yes but very powerful. Wonderful write.

Mr.Lopez

[Antony]

It would be nice to know what the future holds for us or how we could have made it a better experience, our future always reflects from our past and that is the mystery of life. I believe life would be dull if we knew the outcome, we would lose our driven purpose.

Tony

[The Mad Prophet]

The time when one is still searching who they are, but starts to feel like what they are don't belong in this world. I tend to stare off into the road when I walk to work and think that this world is not meant for me, that all I am supposed to do is watch, don't get involved.

Very well written, very well done. You describe something hardly anyone thinks about.

[Michael X]

I think many people can relate to the meaning this poem brings to life, the hollowed emotional spiral of the downtrodden, its picturesque, great job, thanks for sharing your talent.