You cried more than I did

The loss of a loved one

When I was 3 you broke my favourite Barbie. You cried more than I did.
When I was 5 you were pulling my sled and ran so fast I fell off and hit my head. You cried more than I did.
When I was 8 you knocked me off the slide. You cried more than I did.
When I was 10 you ate my birthday cake. You cried more than I did.
2 days ago your hair was falling out in clumps and you passed away. I cried more than you did.

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

This was short but very very good.
I really like the way you have written this out it sounds very poetic.
The way you say that these bad things where happening to you not them but they cried more then you did.
Then the twist at the end where you cried more then they did, because they died.
This had a fair lot of meaning to it, and it was quite heartbreaking towards the end.
I enjoyed the read.
Sorry for your loss :(

[Gabriel]

Nice poem, feels truly heartfelt.. grabs you by the guts.. well written.