Missing Piece

 

Missing Piece

 

I sat in my room with a calm daze

Thinking of those bittersweet bygone days

Days where we laughed and horsed around,

Refusing to let the world keep us bound.

 

Reminiscing alone, I shed a tear

Because I’m simple dying for you to be here

Instead of being so far and away

Leaving me longing for that one sweet day

 

That day when we reunite

When we finally come together

We’ll laugh, hug, and cry

Praying it’ll last forever.

 

So as I sit in my room with a calm daze

Thinking of those bittersweet bygone days

I smile at the promising future

And embrace that one sweet day

 

That day when I see your face.

Author's Note

I wrote this when I missed my first love.

Reviews

[Emily]

This is a very nice piece. I can completely see and feel the situation you're writing about. In the second stanza,
"Reminiscing alone, I shed a tear
Because I'm simple dying for you to be here
Instead of being so far and away
Leaving me longing for that one sweet day"

I think you meant "simply dying" rather than simple.
I really liked this stanza the most. we, as readers, feel this paragraph settle for us whether this is a positive piece or a sad piece. You clearly have established a flow with the rhyming ending of each line. Though that is not a style I prefer in most poetry, you have done it very well and kept the flow from feeling forced into the words which rhyme.

Very nice work. It is really nice to see a poem about hope in the future, and getting reunited with the love of your life. I hope things were glorious on that day, or that they will be when it comes to pass.

[Madison Night]

ah i love it!!

[FMAfan218]

Beautiful

[Dia-EchoingWind]

I liked this piece and the structure was put together well also good word choice for the piece.Well done!!!