Breathe with me

6.14.2007 (2) [611 W. Healey Apt 9] (Song)

 

I can see that your gaze has met mine

and we’re caught in this best of lust

but sometimes we just don’t know

if this is going to pass

if this is going to be

everything that we want it to be

 

Won’t you just

Breathe

Breathe with me            (two voices)

 

I feel your body next to mine

and we’re tangled in this mess of passion

but sometimes we just don’t know

if this is going to last                              (another voice) or

if this is going to be

everything that we want it to be

 

But if you just

Breathe

Breathe with me            (two voices)

 

I know that your hand is wrapped in mine

and we’re living in this movement of love

and in every moment we know

that its not going to pass

that its going to be

everything that we want it to be (another voice) always and forever

 

And now you just

Breathe

Breathe with me            (two voices)

 

(another voice) Now you just

(another voice) Breathe

Breathe with me            (two voices)

 

 

 

Kevin M. Reader

 

Reviews

[Selena Chapman]

Sweet in its simplicity. You deliver your message with sincerity. I liked the flow and it does read like a song, with a distinctive rhythm. The imagery is good, I could picture the lovers in their tangled mess of passion on a sultry night. I liked your use of italics and bold to separate the different voices in this piece, very clever, that. My favourite part:"I feel your body next to mine and we're tangled in this mess of passion but sometimes we just don't know if this is going to last or if this is going to be everything that we want it to be"The lines:"Wont you just Breathe Breathe with me"and their variations reminded me of a breathing exercise I once read of in the Kama Sutra. Interesting that you chose that specific imagery, I have to wonder at the references to breath now... is it the sharing of breath as in that great treatise of love, listening to heartbeat and synchronizing the breath of two lovers... Very deep, indeed. Thank you for sharing, Kevin.

[Carl Taylor]

I really loved it, I have only really loved one other poem, "the red wheel barrow." So great job really.

[Jillian Ashe]

Loved this! I really like how you made it with more than one person. If you tweaked it a bit it would be an awesome song! Thanks for sending it to me.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is something between lust and love , then it seems to go to love.. i like the two voices..this is a sensual and oh so romantic poem..

Chloe
xoxo

[Aya Fayyad]

beautiful , romance written at its best.
the poem is very lyrical , it should be sung !

lovely.

[D . R . Marais]

dude this was sweet... no better muse than love. a sensuous, classy piece. Idealistic, and romantic at best... don't ever loose that man, the world is out to make a cynic of us all

[Erotic Goddess]

Oh this was beautiful Kevin. I love the way you put the voices together, the way you drew the attention to certain things with the "voices". This was a great poem and I enjoyed reading it!

[Natalie Anne]

i like the word 'breathe'. It's so passionate & lustfull.

Now you just
Breathe
Breathe with me

Dude....I feel the love

[revolution9]

This exudes so much passion. Without passion there cannot be love. Without love there cannot be passion. This is a beautiful piece. It flows so well and could even be turned into a song. I loved it!


Won�t you just
Breathe
Breathe with me

^^ Loved those lines --- so much love and passion.

Excellent write!

:)

[Heavyhearted]

first thing that caught my eye was the title, it's so strong. i also had 2 read the poem several times cz each time i keep skipping to the end out of excitement. i love the atmosphere you have created with the precise choice of words and how you included two characters.
i love this poem so much, it's also light and lyrical. it would make a fine song, so passionate and warm.

[Robert Luna]

You place your words beautifully and capture such a pure emotion. Wonderfully written and perfect flow. This was a movement of art.


Great Job!!!