My Grandpa, the genius.

2.28.2007 (2) [At EAPS]

 

My Grandpa, the Genius.

 

Dangfangled contraption.

-expletive expletive expletive-

Are your cousins in the house?

 

                        No, don’t worry Grandpa.

 

I’m tired of wrastling with this technology box.

Camera, ha!

This thing just captures one second in time that we’d normally forget.

 

                        Isn’t it great?

 

I can’t believe I ever wanted one of these.

That’s what happens when you retire.

You sit around and watch Okrah,

And she puts ideas in your head.

           

                        Happy Father’s Day, by the way.

 

Oh grateful day!

I got it to work.

Strike a pose.

Say Cheese.

 

                        …cheese.

 

 

I love you Grandpa.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Kevin M. Reader

 

Reviews

[T. F. Rice]

Kevin:

This was an endearing piece. Thanks for sharing it, submitting to the contest. It didnt make the winning spot in "The Other Herald's Summer Writing Contest". This was the last cut.

Thanks for your patience. We had tons and tons of submissions for this contest, and we read/considered every one.

Please feel free to submit in the future, to our contests on Writerscafe.org, or by email to [email protected]. If you submit there, please do so as text in the email, and include basic information, i.e. name as you wish it to appear if published, short bio, and mailing address (for free copies, which are payment in every case).

TOH is a monthly publication of literary works, writing contests, submissions opportunities, columns, articles of interest to writers, and much more. Check us out any time on www.tfrice.etsy.com where there are some back issues available (to buy, or to look at anyways).

Most of all, be encouraged to "write on" and know your submission was appreciated much.

Kind regards,
T F Rice
Editor of THE OTHER HERALD

[Raef C. Boylan]

I found this really endearing.
Most of the phrasing you choose to form the dialogue here is realistically familiar, making this an enjoyable read
e.g.
"-expletive expletive expletive-
Are your cousins in the house?
No, don�t worry Grandpa." - all readers should be able to relate to this exchange.

The two personalities are definitely established, without any narrative description, which i think is admirable.

Thanks for posting this; i like it a lot.

P.S. throughout the poem, you spell it "Grandpa", but in your title there's no 'd' - is this a typo, or done deliberately?

[Amanda Crandall]

Yey!

This thing just captures one second in time that we�d normally forget

That line right there pins the ending!

You're on to something here I like it, it gave me a warm fuzzy feling.

[Phibby Venable]

I like this. It is very well written and the dialoque moves along revealing
the personalities of the speakers. A fine piece.