unheard

she stands defeated

as words elude her

his mind was closed

Author's Note

Ketoma - 1/14/2012

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The reflective holds quite...
well in this one...both sides...
a conflicting matter...
made in few lines of understanding...

[Kellyrose]

Thank you for your kind words :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...

[paddy d daly]

facing up to fact is never easy, battle against a closed mind is impossible, you say much in so few
words

[Kellyrose]

Thank you, I appreciate your kind words

[therisa]

Your words bring back memories of the most painful kind, of my mom's reaction, when I tried to tell her, I was a transsexual lesbian. That day marked the end of our relationship, as parent and child, and our relationship, period. Something, I don't like to dwelve upon.

Sorry, for airing my dirty laundry like this, but you have written a very powerful poem, is so few words.

[Kellyrose]

I am sorry that it brought you painful memories, but thank you for your compliment :)

[therisa]

Your welcome. These memories of mine, need to be faced, if I hope, to heal.

[Neville]

Bang, ouch this is great. Don't it slap ya in the face... All good Things my new Friend, N

[Kellyrose]

Thank you; yes feeling unheard can be hard :)

[Neville]

Then don't allow it --- Keep writing, N

[Shaquana Adams]

Many people can relate to this. Such emotion in one short stanza. Bravo. :)

[Kellyrose]

Thank you for your kind words :)

[Dhaye]

That conflict between lovers...one completely submits while the other resists.
Concise yet presented a sad story.

[Kellyrose]

Thank you for your kind words

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

So much said with so little... Well done.

[Kellyrose]

Thank you :)

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Happens frequently today in the busy world.

[Kellyrose]

Absolutely, thanks for taking the time to read my work

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome.

[Mark]

Nicely done in just a few words. The whole story is in my head!

[Kellyrose]

Thank you Mark, I appreciate your reading my words

[m.s.early]

And the conversation ends...
Leaves me wondering if they agreed to disagree or the divide was lengthened. This is a brief but well told story. Easy to relate and definitely relevant.

[Kellyrose]

Thank you so much. The divide lengthened.