The Long Awaited Meeting

A man waits for his beloved at the airport.

The long awaited meeting
 

An adrenaline Rush! An upcoming conference She would finally get to see him late this November! A late call to him, he excitedly listened He would finally be able to wrap his arms around her! ~~~~~~~~ He would meet her late afternoon flight He thought, we can dine and dance all night! Finally the time to see him was soon to be here Her pounding, aching heart would fill her with cheer ~~~~~~~~ He arrived early at her gate.....So that he could wait (and wait!) Will I know what to do? Will I know what to say? ~~~~~~~~ The announcement is made to all in the airborne room And all in the plane feel impending doom.... He got the cautious news from those on the ground "Can this be true?" He asks as his heart start to pound She sits buckled in and she prays and she prays She asks HIM to help the pilots to find a way The big metal bird finally lands -Major delays All is all right, they all received HIS praise ~~~~~~~~ Anxiously he awaits, trying to put himself at ease... She thinks, "Will he? Is he? Oh Please!" He pushes up close along with all the others She desperately tries to maintain her druthers ~~~~~~~~ There eyes finally meet, two uneasy smiles It seems like its been two billion miles She says to him softly, "I'm sorry I'm so late." He says nothing. He only holds her tight.

Author's Note

Just a little romantic write. I realize that I am not a poet. I prefer short stories and erotica to rhyming.

Reviews

[Aramey]

Sometimes, it's not about the "skill" of the poet. Some of the best poems are simply how much the reader can relate to it. And each of us have our own style, so there is now skill.... just whether or not we can FEEL what is going on. This is something I can very much relate to in my current circumstances, and a refreshing write. The imagery of fear, followed by the welcome feel of comfort is very good. Good work!

[Steve]

Thank you for a wonderful comment. That helps to inspire me.

[Carlie]

Such a sweet write that conjures up so many feeling within the mind of the reader. I felt each emotion as I read about these two lovers and their sweet reunion.

[EMW]

Interseting but in a good way.

[Alexandria]

awwwwwwwwww thats so romantic
that was a great read for me
specialy reading the ending
makes you apriecate every moment you have with a loved one
Great Job
P.s I still liked the erotica story one better though :p lol

[Snapdragon]

I think you're wrong. You do have a poet in there somewhere and a romantic heart to match. This is very sweet and touching.

[Kaitlyn]

Very different from your usual style, I must admit, but you might have a knack for poetry. I agree that it was sweet. If you don't like rhyming, try writing poems that don't rhyme. Those are fun too. Keep writing!
~Blessed Be and Merry Meet, Merry Part, Merry Meet Again!

[Poetic Beauty]

this is a truly romantic write and I don't read writes like this from many men. As i was reading I was afraid you were going to make the plane crash but I was so happy when I read the end of this. Could picture a woman sitting nervously praying in the plane seat hoping that they made it as thoughts of him ran threw her anxious mind.

[thatbryngirl]

I didn't think it flowed that well, but other than that, i thought it was good:) it wanted me to read all the way to the end, which is a good thing...and it was cute and i liked all the anticipation built up throughout the poem. nicely done.

[Skye Fields]

This is cute! It's hilarious how many exclamation points you have in the first few stanzas; I thought that was very clever. I was kind of disappointed when you reverted to other, less exciting forms of punctuation, but I guess it would get a little tiring have exclamation points all the way through. You could try that for another poem, though. It might be fun! And if you don't want to, I'll happily snap up that assignment.

Aaaaanyway...back to the poem! I like the narrative quality, and for a moment I was terrified for the passengers' lives. A very real, very functional, very jarring transition from humor to tragedy to romance. All this emotional bouncing around is...um...interesting. Consider beefing it up even more. Throw in every extreme emotion you can think of. Airports tend to inspire bipolarity, at the very least. In this case, go for centi-polarity. Or whatever. Just something to think about.

Also, you might consider ditching the rhyme scheme. It's forced almost everywhere, so either trim it up or do what you seem to do best, which is short story style. This could be an excellent prose poem.

The last stanza, I have to say, is magnificent. And a great example of half-rhyme. Ah! Which brings me back to my last paragraph. You CAN rhyme if it's half-rhyme with an established meter. That would be nice.

The second-to-last stanza is also adorable. I love the use of "two billion miles." It's so casual, so HUMAN, that it really fleshes out and gives warmth to the poem.

This seems close to completion. Don't give up on it! I see a ton of potential, and I AM the Queen of the Universe, after all, so I know everything :)

Best,

Skye

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

You did an excellent job at building momentum and anticipation. I thought for a moment the plane was going to crash and all would be lost! Thank goodness this was not the case. Sometimes more things are said in silence than could ever be spoken with words. I felt him embrace her with his soul. Great job.

Linda Marie