Sometimes, it's not about the "skill" of the poet. Some of the best poems are simply how much the reader can relate to it. And each of us have our own style, so there is now skill.... just whether or not we can FEEL what is going on. This is something I can very much relate to in my current circumstances, and a refreshing write. The imagery of fear, followed by the welcome feel of comfort is very good. Good work!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you for a wonderful comment. That helps to inspire me.
This is really good, especially if it's your first poem. I especially like the part where it seemed the plane would come down, you described the fear not directly, but still very clearly and skillfully. I do think it would sound a little better if you replaced 'hands' with 'heart', as in 'his heart starts to pound'. Hands pounding don't exactly make sense to me, but maybe I'm alone in this feeling. Anyway, great work and keep going!
Sometimes, it's not about the "skill" of the poet. Some of the best poems are simply how much the reader can relate to it. And each of us have our own style, so there is now skill.... just whether or not we can FEEL what is going on. This is something I can very much relate to in my current circumstances, and a refreshing write. The imagery of fear, followed by the welcome feel of comfort is very good. Good work!
Posted 11 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you for a wonderful comment. That helps to inspire me.
It seemed to head towards a tragedy at the beginning, which makes the very simple but extremely romantic ending even better. The pacing of the poem also links to the time in which the couple have to wait to see each other, which makes it feel like we're experiencing it with them. Really good.
Awww, this was so sweet! There's a story to this poem. It differs from ones I write (where the words are all jumbled up to achieve creativity!) This is so touching. You can breathe in the emotions these characters feel. Excellent!
Aw :) this is cute. Scary to think they could be separated at any moment; I really thought they would be. But then the plane lands! Delayed, but safe no less. It was wonderful for...someone who thinks he's no poet ;)
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It's nice to be back more often now.
I read and review a lot, but I don't like read requests. It seems forced.
I write when I want to or feel that bit of inspiration. But, .. more..