Lost Feelings

The pain of a love that will never happen

 

Every day Day after day It happens every day! I come to work Just like I am supposed to And I see you I try to pretend that everything is ok I try to be somewhat detached Like I am not pushing it But then I see you I try to act natural To not give you too much attention To not look too long into your eyes But I can't not look over at you Its so hard to not tell you how I feel To not come off as being consumed with you How can I look at you without giving away how I feel? If I tell you how I feel How will you respond? Will you roll your eyes? Will you start to avoid me? I couldn't face you then Do you by chance already know how I feel? By my longer looks By my attentiveness? Do I look at you too much? When I called you at home that time Did I appear to be strange? Was I a little wierd? I couldn't look at you the next day Why do I feel this way about you? There are others....But they don't match up somehow Looking at you is so special Could it somehow be strangely possible that you could might feel that same way about me? Or is this just too impossible? I could look at you all the time then!

Author's Note

This was very painful. But writing about it helped!

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The emotions in this are true and honest, that's what I liked the most. I think we've all been here, loving from a distance; staying at arms length and falling deeper into the web than we originally anticipated. You brought to life a situational image; painted a picture with your words that we could all follow and suffer through with you. My suggestion...write her a letter and see what happens :)

[Steve]

Thank you for reading and commenting. I talked with her in person......things werent meant to me in the long run. I felt silly, but we got past it. lol

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Aaaww...I was hoping for the fairy tale.

[Iota]

This is like wondering if you are stuck on the friends ladder or do you have a chance at love with someone. The joy and pleasure of seeing her daily but the pain of wanting more. Since this seems to be more personal than the enjoyment of writing, I can only comment. I believe true emotional pieces of work stand on their own as they were written, so great job on this one.

[Alana]

Wow. Just wow. So much emotion, and the way you captured it. I felt the imagery, I could see someone gazing onward with this powerful look. I love how pure this is, of how much joy and how much agony you experience in the simple gesture of looking. I'm glad writing about this helped, I hope your heart feels a little lighter, and your looks are one day returned :)

[Mary Evans]

Nice piece but it sounds more like a confession than a poem (cant really give you much feedback on the style I'm a total poetical failure) As for story, its deep and emotional. I can keep commenting on the plot for quite a while but i don't think it will help you improve the writing itself.
So i guess my only advice is to somehow make it more flowy.

[EmpressPoetess]

Very emotion filled write. has the elements of love and heartache...well done

[Ivy]

I like it, strong emotions.

[Taylor H.]

I know how you feel...Im sorry. This is a wonderful poem...great job