I'm so haunted

Hard times drag on.

I’m so haunted

barbwire on the heart

knifes in your mouth

and if I saw myself on the street I wouldn’t give her a second glance

no one does

my veins are all caught up in tangles

the song I listen to over and over

is the only thing keeping my blood pumping

keeping my fingers typing words

I’m so haunted

you break my spirit

its shatters and and seeps out through my ribs

carrying broken pieces of my heart

landing hard on the cold floor

of you

tangled in ghosts of what you used to be

I’m so haunted

 

Author's Note

eh

Reviews

[Arthur Crow]

The whole piece is wickedly beautiful.. so much depth and conviction. Very good word play, really enjoyed the journey.

[[untitled]]

is that not what the living are for? if you have never been haunted then you are not alive. your abstract, eclectic style reminds me of my former self. a critical eye comes with age. great ideas, good poem.

[Moki]

"tangled in ghosts of what you used to be"


This is a little rough, but that line stands out incredibly.

[Samith Pich]

wow... nice. You've given the reader something really meaty to chew on. Ok I see you're re-occurring use of muisc as a device to overcome/ escape and move on. The language is lovely 'knifes in your mouth' & 'you break my spirit/ its shatters and and seeps'.

You don't NEED the last line. And actually, the second last line (which you could put somewhere else) is not necessary either. Try reading it without the last two lines.

THANKYOU for sharing :)

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

This was good. I think it could use a little work, however. You could really expand on this. Why is it that he haunts you and how? Maybe some day when you are bored, you should try to rewrite this and see what comes out of it.

Thank you for sharing.

[Chloe Madison Taylor.]

i think i believe you.

[An owl on the moon]

Brilliant movement through the dark places of the soul's memory and the deep loss of friendship... Amazing write!

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

the pain within your heart is powerful, but if you really wanted to over come it, being human, you can. :D great work.

[Broken.]

Great description

Great use of words

That seem to make the message come across clearly in this.

[Hoshi Nami]

i really feel like you captured the real essence of being trapped