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A poem about my... almost? Ex...?

I have this thing I can't deny, 

see once upon a time

there was this guy...

He captured me

and let me free

but still he holds

a part of me

I've tried and tried

to let him go

but for some reason 

I still can't say no

He's taken my heart

Tortured it good

I said I couldn't

See no one understood

because once upon a time

he fascinated me

he had me breathing

just for he

And well silly me

I couldn't see

he was just using me

He kissed me first

then things went on

Underneath the golden sun

I could never foresee how things had gone

I thought for sure I'll be with him

But then weeks past

Things were looking grim

Months went by

I let it go

I found someone else

to take the show

But still I look back at him

my heart will ache

and my eyes become dim

for a few months back

I saw him

with a new girl

hanging on his trim

He said he didn't care for her

but I didn't believe 

see... I'm smarter then before

Not to dumb to receive

Since then things have changed

I have a knight 

He won't be exchanged

this is a man

not some silly boy

who ran away

 from what could have been joy

Though I know

I'm happy now...

sometimes I can't help

but feel that silent vow

those whispered words

and kisses caressed

and yet I still wish him the very best....

Author's Note

ignore grammar or spelling mistakes.

Reviews

[benjammingham]

Great poem!
Your rhyme scheme was really interesting. I haven't really delved into different rhyme schemes like that, but obviously it comes easily to you...
I don't think it's very long, because it, again, told a story.

I've been through a similar experience except now I'm friends with the girl who left me. And though I sometimes still wish that it was her I was with, I accepted that she didn't want me in that way. I hope you can do the same for your friend.

You're definitely the better person and to explain that, I'll leave you with this song: Bitter by Teddy Geiger Look it up with the lyrics....

[Alicia™]

I like the last line the most… The feeling of how you can still care about someone after he's hurt you is a strong one. This poem is a little long, though, but I like it.