Six AM is like Chewing on Glass

Six AM is a boy
Let’s talk about him for a minute
He’s the voice that rips me awake in the mornings 
Though I feel like his harsh presence should still belong to the night
His heart still wets my eyes
And his name still ices my tongue 
He’s a mocha skinned surgeon with an empty heart 
That’s been thrown into too much pitch black gravel to get
You see he believes to thoroughly in raven’s feathers
And too little in faith 
He knows my underbelly and my secrets and I’d like to say I know his too
But he’s too busy with a little girl to look to me these days
That’s alright. I don’t miss the relationship. But I wish his eyes weren’t so demonic

Six AM knows just how to steal my heart then spit it out

I wish I could say I knew how to do the same
But we all know it wasn’t me who hurt him just the opposite in fact
But I don’t wish him harm. I wish him well. I almost miss the person behind the mask 
                                       Infact

Reviews

[LJW]

I'm doing this review with voice software so forgive me. Sometimes the words don't transfer well. I would strike line 2. I would strike the word still in line number four. Been thrown into too much pictures black gravel to get what? Check that line again maybe you missed a word. I would suggest not starting any line with the words you see. I would talk about the entire last stanza ending it at spit it out.

Hope the suggestions help.