Maybe I should have Learned by Now.

I could fall in love with just his voice, but that wouldn't be very practical given my track record.

I know what it feels like when water is on my body

With nothing

                                (in-between)

I know what it feels like to give away my heart

With eyes bruised and broken bones

Captivating my open skull

Tantalizing the remains of my rib cage

Captured by magic potions and spells

All the fault of this

                Former lover

I gave you all I had

 

Don’t tell me I gave him everything

The pieces of my ribcage that didn’t heal

Well I guess they’ll always be his

And I’ll be a little more cautious with my heart this time.

 

Or you know.

That’s what I tried to tell myself anyway

 

Of course when I got the wind knocked out of me

The second time around

I could feel my rib cage crunch faster

It was nothing but open heart surgery

As I caress my heart

 

It’s in your face for the moment

Out of its cavity

Inside my chest, torn out and glistening

Feeling the weather

And oh dear lord

When I tell you it’s all your fault

 

You better protect it with your hands

Guard that with your life this time around

I don’t want to pick it out of the dirt

                (a second time)

 

I guess maybe dirt got in my eyelashes as I fell

Clouding my vision

Dear lord why can’t I see

They could have told me love makes a person

 

Blind!

 

So suddenly I’m tired

And I can feel your hands around my heart

As it pulses in your ears like a conch shell ocean melody

 

I know you hate to dance

But would you dance with me

If I asked you too?

 

Maybe someday

Time will have raced by

Our kids will all be adults

We’ll have gone through life like that

 

Or maybe we’re down a road of no thank you

No scuffed hearts

Or you know

                Broken bones

Don’t worry darling

Like the pieces of my ribcage heart

That stick to your hands when we finally take part

 

So this meeting

Well it exists only in

                A perfect

                                (universe) 

Reviews

[Ees]

Nice.
There is a lot of strength and solidity in the way that you used your words.
" Former lover
That I gave away all I had" - sounds odd. You may want to think about rephrasing something in there. Read it out loud.

"
Of course when I got the wind knocked out of me
The second time around
I could feel my rib cage crunch faster the second time"
consider changing the second use of "the second time"- it sounds a bit heavy right after an other. Perhaps just leave it off. You don't need anything there really after the word "faster".

" So suddenly I’m tired
And I can feel your hands around my heart
As it pulses in your ears like a conch shell ocean melody"- Love this stanza!

Nice. I really enjoyed reading this,
good job!

[kera moondust]

thanks for your suggestions, reading over this again I do see what you mean about the first stanza's gave away all I had line, I rephrased it and I think it works better, and I think the repeating the second time around was a mistake in my typing. XD So thank you for pointing that out aswell. =) Your review is appreciated thanks so much.

[Ees]

No problem my dear. I figure that we all have it the right way in our heads, so that when we put it too the page we see it the way we had it in our heads rather than what is really shows up on the screen.
It works wonderfully the way that you have it now.
good job with this poem, I still like it!