The Parade

Courtesy - Leander Samantha Gallyot

Come one, come all.
Stare down at us as we fall.
Oh! Won't you stay for the show??
We're putting on quite an act, you know.

Mascara coated eyes,
Glaring at the bleeding skies
Ladies and gentlemen, boys and girls,
Watch silently as the fire twirls

Silence, then a drum roll please
Watch those crawling with disease,

Skulls and broken skin.
The living dead, won't you join in?

Can you hear the music play?
Its twisted like the games we play.
I'll tell you a secret, but do not shout
Once your in you can never get out.

Ha ha ha you're trapped inside
There is no where that you can hide
So shut those pretty lips, drink your glass of blood in small sips.

Cobwebs cover your hair
Giggles and screams will fill the air.
The song of death it has been sung!
But this night has only just begun..

Author's Note

This poem was written by a friend who is very shy to show her work to the world, I'm doing this behind her back:) shhhh.... Please review...

Reviews

[Anahat]

Loved the last two lines!
Womderful! She should not be afraid infact proud of what she writes :)
Keep encouraging :)

[jennifer little]

I liked this its amazing wonderfully flowed

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you Jen

[jennifer little]

your welcome

[Tricia Pattinson]

Great imagery and timing is good. The poem's voice came across as mischievous and detached. The word "small" before the word "sip" caused a noticeable timing interrupt for me. Overall it is a good poem that I enjoyed reading.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you Tricia, will convey this to the writer...

[Matching Socks]

Awwww. :-)
That's sweet. She shouldn't be shy.
It's a good poem conjures up some cool images.
I'm thinking of the black parade by my chemical romance.
It has a lyrical flow...

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Yes, I love that song too, exactly what i related to when i first read this poem...Will convey the message...Thank you for your review...

[NoelHC]

Tell your friend there is no reason to be shy, this poem is well done, and brings up some vivid images.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thanks Noel...WIll convey the message

[Confuser]

Tell her from me it is great, i was pulled in; I love it all. Sounds like Hotel California. HA - I love it. I just recently used the words "twisted games" in a poem, there are so many you know, this one brings back the feeling of childhood at the fair/circus. Thank you and thank her.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you Confuser...she may soon join this forum and share alot more of her work...

[Confuser]

Thought it was great; have a couple of new poems; cannot seem to send out request; if ya have time. Anyway....I cannot write like this.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

I'm on it....

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

I'm on it....

[Confuser]

Thank you for the writing. Thank you...................................