Borrowed Life

Unworthy is a borrowed life and thought
That leads unto a disappointed knot

Continual search for justification and twisted truth
You read in greed, yet your mind is mute

Studying for a glint of logic or a slight of sense
You drift far away from sanity's fence

In hope Bolster your self-esteem
You cry and blame and fight and scream

For only you it will be true, just and right
Self-judgement a cause is a long foresaksn flight

Yet all around you still tastes of salt
For only you could find its faults

And only you will find its taste
Surrounded in a self-pitiful waste

And only you will find this sorrow
For a life and quotes from others, you borrow

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

this is the first piece of yours that I have read and the rhythm and flow here is exquisite.. the rhymes don't feel forced and the message delivered..

one part in particular really stood out to me...

"Continual search for justification and twisted truth
You read with greed, yet your mind is mute"..... powerful, clever phrasing to an absolute truth.. unfortunately... too many people will "hear" what you are saying, but they don't "listen"... BIG difference..

So many today suffer from low self-esteem, depression, anxiety, addiction, you name it and go down the path to destruction because they don't get the help they so desperately need.. so it is like they are just "borrowing time"...

short, concise, real, honest piece that I thoroughly enjoyed.. well done..

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you so much for your kind words, so sorry, i replied so late, i was in a bad car crash...

[yuki]

very nicely done I love the flow of this

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you so much Yuki...

[Kenneth The Poet]

I like this piece. Love the rhyme and message.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you....

[Rene Salinas]

As I read it it came at me as an open invitation to think. That phrase that so many times I was told while doing computer science "think it - through" . I always looked up to the skies. What does that even mean think it through? is a lifeless piece of machinery, everything about it is done and dusted so to speak there is nothing to think I used to joke. But in here the indication is that it would be way easier just to jump into any current stream and claim it mine as it needs no considerable amounts of effort. What about think it through then ? And making it mine or yours...

Thankyou

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

I'm glad you felt that way, thank you for that wonderful interpretation of it. It has given me another dimension to think of in this respect... Thank you so much