Borrowed Life

Unworthy is a borrowed life and thought
That leads unto a disappointed knot

Continual search for justification and twisted truth
You read in greed, yet your mind is mute

Studying for a glint of logic or a slight of sense
You drift far away from sanity's fence

In hope Bolster your self-esteem
You cry and blame and fight and scream

For only you it will be true, just and right
Self-judgement a cause is a long foresaksn flight

Yet all around you still tastes of salt
For only you could find its faults

And only you will find its taste
Surrounded in a self-pitiful waste

And only you will find this sorrow
For a life and quotes from others, you borrow

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

this is the first piece of yours that I have read and the rhythm and flow here is exquisite.. the rhymes don't feel forced and the message delivered..

one part in particular really stood out to me...

"Continual search for justification and twisted truth
You read with greed, yet your mind is mute"..... powerful, clever phrasing to an absolute truth.. unfortunately... too many people will "hear" what you are saying, but they don't "listen"... BIG difference..

So many today suffer from low self-esteem, depression, anxiety, addiction, you name it and go down the path to destruction because they don't get the help they so desperately need.. so it is like they are just "borrowing time"...

short, concise, real, honest piece that I thoroughly enjoyed.. well done..

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you so much for your kind words, so sorry, i replied so late, i was in a bad car crash...

[Surya pradha]

beautiful work here! nice title with a great message. good work!

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you Surya

[Eleanor]

Honest and full of talent!
I liked the message in this. We all got to be self dependent. The title itself justifies your poem.
Would love to read more by you :)
Thank you.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you Anonymous :) (Would like to have a name to go with that face)

I would love it if you would review the poem i wrote "The Road"

[Eleanor]

Haha I'm Isha :)
Sure. i would.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you Isha :)

Anything in particular in your work, you would like me to go through..?

[Eleanor]

I'd really like your reviews on "moving forth" and "letting go" :) Thank you.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

On it........

[Norah]

wow, what a profound piece of poetry...great write :)

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

THank you Norah, glad you found it as such...

[Eve Ola]

your title is enough to grab my attention.overall its great Well done friend

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

:) THank you so much eve,

[Tricia Pattinson]

Very creative presentation and thoughtfully written. I enjoyed reading.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you, glad you enjoyed it :)

[Ashira Macy]

It is hard for some people to take responsibility for their own actions, but it is something we must all learn to do, and have some humility while we are at it. We are too proud nowadays, and often not for valid reasons. Great write.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

True...and when they cannot do that, they make the lives of others around them hell...

[little thoughts]

very nice thinking and beautiful writing. agree with what you have said. well done !

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you for your kind words...

[Sophy Freebirds]

My favourite couplet was the fifth one. It really did flow very well. Yes you need to be self- reliant.. Depending on people for justice or other stuffs will leave you sore. I liked the message of the poem. What value is it to live a life which isn't on your own free will!!".. :) well done

~Sophy

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you Sophy, This poem is dedicated to my inspiration and mentor for writing poetry...Robin Williams...