The Societal Definition of a Street-Walker

Sorry if you don't like rhyming, forgive me. If you have it in you. I was just kind of sickened by the societal objectification of females, and specifically the remarkable level of anti-feminism.

Below-the-belt, a barren waste of bordellos,

Bread-winner with her foot on tournament ground,

Compasses lead to carcasses,

cars filled with compartmented cartilage,

 

Waiving a broken thumb, and a stutter to her walk,

A bloody buttercup, daddy told her “That’ll shut her up.”

Who could mutter “f**k?” like it’s a question?

Eco-tourists, driving through depression,

She loves it when she’s broken, she sees death as a blessin’.

 

Complex lines driven into her thighs, stripes that lead to

Something she wishes she was, twenty years younger,

With twenty less young ones, young guns with one bullet loaded,

So they can turn their brains to slush when they aim it at someone.

 

Those curves that curse her chest between a corset of bawdy skin

Orchestrate soiree’s with cum-let-loose,

Alone with sapient aliens, slaving to recreate past-times with pass-times,

Reckless bruised gradients, her jaw-line is like the edge of a saw,

Signs of a predator credible enough to open its maw,

But if she speaks, no one listens, rape is a dirty word,
Just listen to law.

Those hips don't need a f**k who in his dreams 
Releases his power-trip upon starlet women,
She needs this 44. Caliber counter-pitch to break
your stranglehold, because to her, you're all just counterfeit.  

Author's Note

I suppose it's about a prostitute. I don't know about the last stanza, seems forced. I'm inclined to remove it.

Reviews

[The White Wolf]

Nah, don't remove the last stanza. I think the first line could benefit from the removal of "who in his dreams", but that is just a suggestion. It seems more powerful to just have the words leading up to that as the first hit of the final thought. You have some real talent.

[Perfect Mistake]

I like that last stanza. Great poem shows the side of her feelings about this. Also very descriptive in your words. Good work

[closed..acct]

I like the last stanza, it has a ummary of it.
I really liked the last line of it.
Deep powerful piece.