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You are a failure

And success for me.

A labor in vain

Or a crinkling display of nimble fingers

Cutting through your aluminum

And twisting you like a carousel spin

Between my thumb and forefinger.

 

Is the love curl attached?

No? Then you are a pocket gift,

My solitary failure.

She is too good for your imperfection

You castrated metal wretch.

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[Rain]

I could spend hours trying to figure this one out. lol. Great lines..
"Is the love curl attached?No? Then you are a pocket gift,My solitary failure.She is too good for your imperfection
You castrated metal wretch"
I didn't realize I had reviewed so much of your work, until I started looking for a piece I hadn't read.
I will give this one, more thought. :) Rain..

[Marie]

Great write, Kenji. Don't forget to vote in my Best of 2007 writing contest.