May I Say How Much I Miss You

here's hoping I've found my mojo again, been a while

Coming home from the night’s slog,

the scent of humanity still heavy 

on my hands, the blood  

scraped grievances of a city 

hell-bent on settling long overdue 

debts, obligations of roots

as ancient as days, I think 

back to when we crept 

past the bemused mastiffs 

to watch the moon dance along 

Tethys lulling banks. How Love, 

how, did we lose ourselves 

in the reeds of the old men’s rancor, 

fall from the heavens -- two 

star-crossed lovers caught in 

the enmity of mirrors -- too 

timid to brave the tempest, 

untwine a future from the inculpations 

of their petty litigations? How Love, 

how I wish, I could turn back  

time, rewind the narrative 

and lie again with you instead 

until all could be forgiven, swept 

by currents out to sea, forever

swallowed by an expanse of water --

had you only waited, had I 

leapt when you stepped 

from the Devil’s point.   

Ken e Bujold

Reviews

[willweb]

I followed this all the way to that point where I felt my heart leap as well. Nicely choregraphed movement within this staggering but as well, sobering poem. Nicely done Ken

[Ken e Bujold]

thanks will. first of any real value in a while. glad you enjoyed the work.

[Ken Simm.]

You know I see this as a beautiful animation. Perhaps two personified city foxes. I am sorry if that is not right but the poem retains a beautiful other worldliness for me. And that is why I find it so attractive.

[Ken e Bujold]

there is never a right or wrong way of reading a poem Ken, and i must say i am very intrigued by your idea. Poem's genesis is in my reading a lot of historical texts at the moment in prep for new project, ancient myths, psychology and elizabethans and then sitting to watch a sunset with a glass of scotch. so who knows, foxes may well have been running deep in the mind.

[Betty Hermelee]

moments looking back on the past...if only we did this or didn't do that...now we're older and still wish things could have been changed...." and lie again with you instead".....(did you mean LIE?) I like the structure of the poem, very easy to follow...and very honest....
Best, B

[Chris Shaw]

I very much enjoyed the couplet structure to this piece Ken. Suits the subject matter well. Poignant reflections here and it’s good to learn that your mojo is back. Have a good Wednesday.

Chris

[Ken e Bujold]

thank u Chris. enjoy the back half of your W as well

[Chris Shaw]

I will do. It has turned pleasantly sunny:)

[Ken e Bujold]

same here. i am getting ready to take my morning constitutional a wee bit early. nice and fresh, think i can beat the stifling heat that is sure to follow later in the day

[Chris Shaw]

Enjoy :) ….

[W. Barrett Munn]

I really like the structure is this. Couplets work well. It is poignant, as well. Good to see you back.

Winston

[Ken e Bujold]

glad to finally have something concrete worth posting