The Rose Elegies (V)

Thirteen: that’s all 

we add up to --

thirteen syllables 

testament to how 

much we wanted 

out of Dodge tonight.

Thirteen syllables: 

testament to how 

little ache’s left.

Ken e Bujold

Reviews

[W. Barrett Munn]

Curious that the first and third stanzas contain 13 syllables sandwiching a 14er. In Germanic-source diction, 13 can be quite a bit. I don't think you were feeling gut, though.

Winston

[John the Baptist]

Thirteen syllables don't add up to much of a debate. Sounds as though retreat came rather rapidly.

[Ken e Bujold]

no and I doubt it survives the final cut of the elegies, merely workshop to see it in a brighter lite. the idea is rife throughout the elegies, so that much survives, but I acknowledge this one is more musing than muse