i do not unknot easily

a bit of fun with form, feeling ee

scarred and

smoothed

                  by

                    the sun

my ache is

unnavigable still

                             to be

defined by some

                             thing

                                     yet

untouched

I do not un-knot

easily or

               if at all

though some

                       times I have

a sense of being

in speech

an audience of

                           one

                           f

the less                peculiar

              atoms split

                                 ting

in

    to 

        two war

                      ring

suns

Ken e Bujold

© 2022

Reviews

[willweb]

Very creative and fun to decipher. I saw the mention of ee cummings below and that was my first thought when reading. This was cool.

[Ken e Bujold]

yes ee was much in mind when dicing this one. I enjoyed cummings a great deal in my youth. he was one of the strong forces on my emerging views that language should be fun. through the yrs I drifted a bit from him, but now and then still feel the pull. And the idea that language of a poem should always be as simple as possible, to allow readers access to enter the work and to carry away as much as possible from it, are still my guiding principles when writing.
Thanks for stopping by Will, visit anytime

ken

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am such a fan of ee

in just spring or any other time.

the rings, the sun...the Lord of the Rings...
ee would have had fun writing poems about that classic...he was classic.
you did this quite well...I had trouble with the "f" as I tried to tie it to make a word with something else.
but I really like this.
j.

[Ken e Bujold]

the f tied to the o above. a classic cummings trick

[Elaine]

Oooooh I did enjoy this form! And the title of it contrasts with the easy sway of words. It feels like it IS unraveling - gently and orderly despite your supposition that you do not unknot easily! This was fun - thanks for sharing!

[Ken e Bujold]

glad you enjoyed the work elaine. stop by anytime

[softlyfall]

Wow. Just when I was beginning to get the hang of line breaks, you make things complicateder.
There is a deep undercurrent of wit even under your darkest words, or perhaps just the word play itself seems play full (har har)
Abstract mythology and Quantum Physics had a baby
I love this, one of my top favs

[Ken e Bujold]

the level of praise for this poem is a wee (make that a lot) puzzling to me. I was merely playing around with form, think of ee cummings, That's not to say the poem doesn't have meaning or value, just that I was more intrigued with the form than the content. seems i may have underestimated the little fellow. Glad you enjoyed it so. (if you are not familiar with ee give him a look, i think you would enjoy the work)

ken

[softlyfall]

It made sense to me, what with knots, aka those in Gordion, and splitting atoms... the sentence structure fell to nuclear fission. This is what I read anyway.
I have read some of almost all poets. I have a very baroque heart and romantic sensibilities, so cummings is not my fav...

[softlyfall]

Frankly, I feel sad for anyone who does not read it my way lol

[Neville]

there's not a single bit o this poem that I don't like .. love the title .. and atoms splitting into two warring suns is the proverbial cherry on the top of the cup cake :)

[Chris Shaw]

I do not unknot easily either. I tend to keep my feelings to myself and can struggle to share them, when I know it is probably best to do that. I liked the format of this poem and the breakup of lines and words. It emphasised that struggle, also the pauses. Busy few days for me. Clearance of my aunt's apartment. Enjoyed the read Ken.

Chris

[Ken e Bujold]

best of luck with the clearing. thanks as always for visit and kind review

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome :)

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Ken… Once upon a time… I did Crewel French knots… a few birds on a branch of Apple blossoms. The breast of the Birds were full of pastel French knots… to this day my 💜 heart is heavy … and I cannot Unknot my feelings until the Snow melts on the Mountain tops. Be blessed and follow the Sunbeams and Dream. gently, Pat

[Ken e Bujold]

thanks pat. have to admit I had to look up what Crewel French knots were. I not much of knitter, at least not when it comes to needle and thread. I am blessed, I am still breathing, and this poem is/was just playing around with form. not sure myself what it means (to me) other than the joy of making something artful

ken

[Patricia Wedel]

Hi Ken… Crewel is an Art of Embroidering ( definitely not Knitting which is boring) to me; however Ladies are very Artful when they Knit with Abandonment. I adore beautiful Birds and we live in a Bird Sanctuary.. Red Cardinals galore and their Mates who seem to raise their families by our Garden Gate… close to the Rappahannock River where much of the Civil War took place (with Hauntings) to this day in Fredericksburg, Virginia. gently, Pat

[duff]

Like a knot baking in the sun we take a beating from the weather. Hardened by the elements. I'm sure I'm way off but an interesting read for sure Ken. I hope you're well.

[Ken e Bujold]

quite well duff. this one could be about just about anything. came out of a fragment and i was playing around with it like ee cummings and in the end liked it well enough to let it roam free

[M.E.Lyle]

It sounds like you might have shingles. I like the way you break things apart, dropping down words, breaking up sentences. We all have our own little set of catchy tricks.
About the poem...It's pretty deep. Maybe deeper than I can dive. I love this line, "my ache is unnavigable,
still to be defined by something yet untouched." That's mind blowing. Loved your work.

[Ken e Bujold]

thanks for stopping by M.E the form is just me having bit of fun playing around with ee cummings in mind.
glad you enjoyed and found meaning to it
stop by anytime
ken

[M.E.Lyle]

Yep, it's always fun to play around with words.