Falling From Eden

Who spoke the first truth before anyone knew

for certain it was in truth our first lie?

Who looked to the sun and gleamed its circle

could be the yoke to enslave us all once

and forever more once we learned division?

Who first wrote of love but spelled it hate,

thereby rendering us deaf and mute

to peace and harmony, life without war?

Who chose to view in pigments, a color

scheme of gradation, segregation?

Was it you, me? Does it truly matter,

which of us birthed the original sin?

Ken e Bujold

2022

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

Never could quite accept that original sin business. I have known people who never did anything original, including sin.

[Ken e Bujold]

wish i had of thought of that , would have been nice addition to the write

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

WOW... you leavea lot to ponder on this fascinating poem.

[red93]

Interesting Work Ken - good clear Poetic diction - nice rhetoric at the end - 'There are more questions than answers'.

[John]

This has me arguing with myself, or myself and the author. Does it really matter? What easily could have strayed into I Want To Teach The World To Sing or Lennon's Imagine is kept on its toes with its series of questions (the author interrogating himself as well as the reader), the rhyming scheme (half rhyme is unsettling) and occasional word play such as truth/in truth. I particularly like the color scheme of gradation, which prompts the question Is a world of peace and harmony possible with some variety and without being boring? and the poems final questions, which wisely asks that we stop apportioning blame.

[Ken e Bujold]

you pretty much covered all the bases John. And as an aside, I certainly didn't want to stray in Lennon's Imagine, which I personally thinks has done far more harm to world peace than good. Imagine, nice song, but horrible way to run a planet

[W. Barrett Munn]

O.K. You got me. Sheepishly holds up hand.

Winston

[Ken e Bujold]

hahaa. A martyr's complex I see. Well have to get in line, I wrote it, so I have first dibs on throwing myself on mercy of the eternal court

[Dave Brown]

you are obviously very gifted, well above my level
your contribution this morning is nothing but impressive
My limited intellect relates mostly to this piece and the 'whoever' question
keep we mere mortals inspired

[Ken e Bujold]

you are too kind sir. Simply happy to have you and others drop by and enjoy the work

[Red Brick Keshner]

Or ask us if we knew that dog is spelt C-A-T.... pointing fingers has never proven itself throughout history to solve any issue, big or small... Deep thoughts and meanderings.

[Ken e Bujold]

i prefer to refer to dog instead of its more backward connotation most of the time. I am spiritual, just not religious in a big tent kind of way

[Red Brick Keshner]

Never been to a big tent except for when the circus came to town.

[Chris]

The questions of the ages - generation after generation. Got milk?

[Ken e Bujold]

no but i have a cow

[Chris]

smiling here... irreverence works well.