I could have stood up and walked
among the unhappy ones. I could have swallowed the stigma of
being on the outside,
lived with derision of having
spoken the truth with an angel's conviction,
knowing I believed what was proper and
decent, equitable if unfeasible, was the most honorable of
choices. I could have spoken up, out, shouted no I won't go
along with the collective madness of the herd. I could have stood
to be counted, convicted, one of the unholy afflicted prepared
to be evicted, banished for life from life. Yes, I could have
stood up and walked among
the unhappy ones. My brothers and
sisters, black brown yellow white
purple and green, I should have stood
up and walked the miles beside you.
At the end of our days if we are lucky enough we are given opportunity for reflection. To ask of ourselves if we did enough. If we showed enough compassion or made a difference in the lives of others. To love beyond ourselves. I would hope most can find a peaceful resignation in their answer. A strong philosophical piece of poetry that cuts deep into the answers of what makes us human, and for which purpose we choose to live for beyond ourselves. CLE
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thank you for the kind, and insightful review CLE. I couldn't have summed up the point of this praye.. read morethank you for the kind, and insightful review CLE. I couldn't have summed up the point of this prayer any better than you just have
Beautiful poem. I feel the guilt as I read "I could have stood up and walked among the unhappy ones" and the grief in the repetition of "sorry".
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2 Years Ago
yes, unlike Mr G, believe me when I say that used well repetition is one of the best friends a poet .. read moreyes, unlike Mr G, believe me when I say that used well repetition is one of the best friends a poet can have
Hello, Ken! :)
I enjoyed this for it’s fine phrasing and elegant flow of thought. The repetition throughout beat an emphatic message of regret and accountability, and brought to my mind the absurd struggle of individuality and culture. To think things “should be” a certain way is an imagining. Society is as it is because of man’s willingness to make it so; so, let’s dream up more compassion and stop idealizing obedience. Thanks for sharing!
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thank you Matt for your kind and considered review. I agree with all you said. For me, the poem is a.. read morethank you Matt for your kind and considered review. I agree with all you said. For me, the poem is as simple a message as simple can be: good men stand by and do nothing at our own peril
You are flagellating yourself for the sufferings of all, or so it sounds. Even the purple and green, whoever they are. I wonder if the concern is mutual.
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2 Years Ago
it is not so flagellating John as it acknowledging the ideal I like to adhere to, but don't always l.. read moreit is not so flagellating John as it acknowledging the ideal I like to adhere to, but don't always live up...If one good man sits quietly and allows bad things to happen, what happens when all the other good men have fallen? as for purple and green, lyrical ok, but also an eye to gender equality issues of today's modern world. If by mutual, you mean is my apology one that other men would share or offer in similar circumstances, I don't expect all would, but some will, and that is the world I want to live in.
One must sometimes weigh the predicted benefit of one's actions with their consequence. Sometimes discretion really is the better part of valor. I know some say, "throw caution to the wind" and be bold in your convictions. And I think there is a time for that type of thinking, especially when every effort of civil discourse has proved fruitless. But I also know that getting yourself killed and counted among the bodies won't save either you or them. Living with guilt is still "living". And surviving today means you might be able to help with the causes of tomorrow. We can't be of use to anyone if we aren't there. I find that same conundrum in the fellow who goes off to voluntarily fight in a war that won't save anyone's "freedom" and gets himself killed leaving his children orphaned at home. Is he really a "hero"? Like so many things it can be argued by perspective and the semantics of importance. What is duty? What is foolhardiness? Thank you for the thought invoking read. I really enjoyed it because it made me think.
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thank you for the review Fabian, and the kindness of consideration. It is all I ask of readers. The .. read morethank you for the review Fabian, and the kindness of consideration. It is all I ask of readers. The prayer is mine, that it may make others think is among the points I want to make. So, again, thanks
“the stigma of being on the outside,
lived with derision of having spoken
the truth with an angel's conviction”
Beautiful and heartbreaking lines here Ken. So raw, real, so authentic, so deeply moving. Great language, flow, internal rhyme, dramatic narration. Regrets, yes, I know them too. But we forgive ourselves and learn, we learn.
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thank you annette, and we do and must learn from our mistakes
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thanks for the great honor of having my work added to your library, think this may be my first such .. read morethanks for the great honor of having my work added to your library, think this may be my first such award
Ken