Sometimes

This poem is not from a personal experience of mine, however one night the words just came out and I thought other people may have had an experience like this in their life

Sometimes

Sometimes I used to wonder
But now I dont care,
The hopes I used to have
Are no longer there,

Sometimes it's tough not to weep,
Having to wipe the tears away
As I lay trying to sleep,
Watching old dreams fade to grey

Sometimes the grass may seem greener
But that's not always the case,
One more chance is all I needed
Before you disappeared without a trace

Sometimes now I wonder
About different things than before,
Why I couldn't see our blunders
And why I don't miss you anymore...

Author's Note

I know my poems don't necessarily follow the rules of poetry but I feel that real poetry is the passion of the words and not the number of syllables in each line etc...

Reviews

[BABSIE BEE]

awwwww I think this is beautiful....sad....but beautiful. A true romance that has been and gone but causing heartache along the way, taking a long while to get over, then again, victorious due to survival. Well done. Thanks for sharing. Going to my favourites.....right nowwwwwwwwwwwwww !!
Babsie Bee xx

[deleted]

We sometimes wonder/ponder on the past instead of moving forward. This is all part of being imperfect creatures. We wonder how they...we could have made things better for others and ourselves. I especially liked these lines:

Sometimes it's tough not to weep,
Having to wipe the tears away
As I lay trying to sleep...

It is always good to weep/cry and free your demonic emotions that takes you back to that place that you question so often. I definitely enjoyed reading this piece. You are truly talented. Keep exercising your gift. I look forward to more of your creativity.

[KenCarswell]

Thanks for your comments everyone, I guess it is true that you are your own toughest critique. To be honest Liz, (if you go by Liz) I never really learned the different types of poetry in school or anything like that so I don't really know the different variations and styles of poems, I just know that I really enjoy writing my thoughts and feelings and they usually just turn out to be poems.

I have only let my parents and one other friend read any of my poems before, so now after hearing what you all have to say about my writing, it definitely gives me the confidence to post more of my old work as well as to write new stuff, so thank you all so much!

[Lizanne]

The rules of poetry are like other rules, not set in stone and can be changed. Maybe you will be the inventor of another form of poetry. I would like to know what you feel is wrong with this writing. For something like this to just have come to you in the night without the experience of it in life, shows you truly have a writer's mind. This is a beautiful work about regret. My biggest regret for it? You do not give yourself enough credit. This is a wonderfully written poem. Look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

[C.L. Wilson]

bleh. i spit upon the rules. i agree. words, images, and emotions are what seperates poetry from all other literature. What you have is a good poem. Moving on feels tough but once you get through it you look back and say that wasn't so bad. or thats how i feel at times. good job. look forward to more of your "rule free" poetry