what you are to me <3

this is your answer

you ask me what you are to me

you ask me why i love you so much

you want to know what i see when i see you

 

your touch, leaves me begign for more

your breath, keeps my heart racing

your eyes, give me comfort

your arms, are my shelter

your lips, touch mine

your fingers, trace circles

your chest, is my pilow

your voice, gives me butterflies

your hair, so soft

 

Reviews

[WriterSki7]

. . . okay, I'm assuming you're new. This is nice, don't get me wrong, but it's rather bland. Starting with "you" and "your" might be creative, but your over-repetative use of them isn't earning you any points with this poem.

My suggestion is to add more meat to this poem. Use a stanza to describe each charactersitic (touch, breath, eyes) as well as cut back on those you can't describe very well. Overall though, keep it up. That's the only way you'll get better.