When will they
See
It’s pure love
Within me
Transcending the
Heart
From the deepest
Part
But
Trapped in themselves
Their truth
They do doubt
So
They stumble about
Entertaining the
Lies
That deceived and tries
To make them choose
Wrong
Knowing
They’ll be gone
Lost
And before long
They’ll be
Lost in the world
Out
In the cold
Forming a
Mould
From what they’ve
Been told
Soul
Being sold
Lonely and
Cold
Open and bare
Unsure and having
No care
Exposed to
Insecurities
Becoming weak
Knowing right
Doing
Wrong
Caught up in
The world’s song
Thinking
That’s where they
Belong
But
If you only know
It’s so wrong
When will you
See
The truth
And pure love
Within me
Look deeper
And
See.
First thing I would like to say is that the content of this poem was very interesting, well thought out and also "thought-provoking." Emotional and moving. The next thing is, the structure of this poem though it feels almost scattered, in all actuality gave a flow which allowed for an almost lyrical sense especially when you read the poem outloud. Already I am catching a rhythm that now I need to find from my free-style beats out of Spotify and say this poem outloud, I think it would work out very well. Nicely done!
Thankyou for putting so much effort into your review- hope you enjoy the beat-🌹
5 Years Ago
Really is a neat poem. Certainly will find two or three beats to it as I feel your poem here has a r.. read moreReally is a neat poem. Certainly will find two or three beats to it as I feel your poem here has a rhythm that is quite flexible.
You've touched me here my dear, some think that You give love to gain something in return because simply it's how they are, they do something to have something "material" in return, the method of pure heart, pure unselfish and free love is simply not in their dictionary, they will get lost in the right and wrong, and trapped inside the material world. and You my dear is a one loving unselfish giving and pure human being. Your moving first verse says it all about You...
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Sending you love and hugs unlimited x forever and slways🌹
Few people try to see real person. It is sad. We show real face to so few. Pure and wonderful love. Worth the wait. Thank you dear Kelly for sharing your amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
You are right - still living and learning- waiting makes it all so interesting- Thankyou 🌹