‘Shallow Soul’

What depths will you go for the truth to show?🌹

‘Shallow Soul’

When your need
Is only
As far as you
Can see

No matter the plea

Then you are blinded
Cannot see
The need
In others

You’ll never set
Yourself free
To be what you
Meant to be

As for self
There is no
Wealth
Of selfish
Flesh

Weak

To every test

Depending on others
Only when
Storms send
You flying
Your mind
Undenying
The self of
Your sufficiency

Nothing

But illiteracy

To the thoughts
Of your mind

Unable to
Define
What’s best
For this
Test

You just
Cannot rest

Your need is
Just greed
An unplanted seed

Unable to feed
The desires
Of your soul
Perhaps
Never your
Goal

Lost in the maze
Becoming a haze

Pretending all well
But
You’re
Hidden
Inside that shell

No wishing well
Or fortune tell
Will ease
The pain

Nothing

To gain -

Until
Silent you
Remain
Stop playing
This game

Inside you must
Seek
Stop all the
‘Clever ‘ words
You speak-

Then only you’ll
Find-
True worth
And
A sound
Mind.

Kelly Fagelund- Gjersoe
8 May 2018

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Amazing poem/song Kelly! On-point title and image- and cuts straight to the bone. Great minimalist lines, flow, rhythm, rhyme, musicality- all perfect. “Pretending all well but you’re hidden inside that shell.”- so many people like this in the world. Your words are truly profound and very insightful.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou - I appreciate your words - yes I cannot take the way people are lost in themselves trying to escape through making others believe they are not what they are and in the end those people get hurt- what silly game is that? Selfless emotionless selfish... makes me so mad yet sad🌹

[Lola_Bee]

I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. every line as if i felt it myself. People are often consumed by themselves they will never be happy.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Truth in your words- sadly the pride and love of self and flesh is the biggest downfall- a test many must learn- Thankyou for stopping by🌹

[sette]

a brilliant masterpiece of yours the words had flowed beautifully

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou I appreciate- just thoughts about people and life🌹

[sette]

no problem

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i was married to someone who played this game---"Clever words" could sway...but in the end, they were shallow...not just those spoken to me, but to most others as well...
true worth is found in honesty to others...not using them, but interacting, being there for them...giving unselfishly.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

I agree totally - Truth is the best in the end your shallow lies and trying to impress only digs yourself a grave and then trying to change may not always be possible that’s y being alone is sometimes better- until the right one comes along- but it’s not only in relationships with partners but life in general-🌹Thankyou for popping by- sun shining here- 🌹

[lightsong]

wonderful, brilliant like always dear Kelly, and I see here many layers, not only to set one self free while considering all whom are around them, but also to set it free in the beginning (inside of them), not all are aware of their inner powers, and they limit it with their actions or thinking, I always find the quiet ones are the smarter, not those who talk and talk without even knowing what they are talking about.... it seems we agree on that :)

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Yes but the silent ones are sometimes the dangerous ones pretending to be one person but are someone else inside- but at end of day it’s our own journey nobody can judge but sadly there’s a price to pay and a reaction to every action- Thankyou for you understanding like always- live and blessings🌹

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Love- sorry not live🌹

[lightsong]

oh yes, they could be that way too, I understand what You mean here dear Kelly.

Love and Blessings too~~~~

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

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