‘One Bite’

The sweetest taste of bliss🌹

‘One Bite’

If I had
You
Close tonight
It would
Take
Just one bite
And
All my
Emotions
Would have
Taken flight..

Kelly Fagelund-Gjersoe
17 April 2018

Reviews

[wordman]

just one bite,i have no doubts

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Well- two won’t hurt- the first to taste the second to enjoy endlessly...🌹

[wordman]

tempting thoughts

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

If thoughts can’t tempt it would be a boring world- 🌹

[wordman]

i think they just set the emotion

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Totally...🌹

[wordman]

so,not so shallow or bad afterall

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Not at all...🌹

[Coyote Poetry]

One taste can lead to dangerous places. Tempting and wonderful words shared dear Kelly. I enjoyed this poem. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Dangerous places are safe places- glad you enjoyed it- Thankyou for taking time🌹

[Coyote Poetry]

I did dear Kelly. Make you want to lock the doors, lose the keys and make love till you cannot. You are welcome.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Lol- sounds like more...don’t overdo it- just do it over and over again...🌹

[Ardra]

Mmm... all are out for one bite....isit some vampire season going on ;)

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Lol/ my bite remains forever- no escaping-🌹

[Ardra]

Mmm like a mark...of claim ;) hahaha...would love that too... too primitive maybe :p

[lightsong]

:) smiling all I can do reading this... as You told me in a review, a kiss is a kiss but a kiss with "You" is something else... I think I can understand the "u" and "You" in Your words, it must be something personal to You, but I also think of it as "You" being the true and real of "u", the larger more deeper... so when u have You, I will be close to "You" :)

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Lol- when you know you know and when you have it u just have it- love the way ur understanding goes so deep- good morning may you have a wonderful day and leave a bit of sparkle everywhere you go🌹

[lightsong]

good morning lovely Kelly, it's morning here too :)

a blow of flowers to each step You take I will send Your way 🌼🌸🌼🌸🌼🌸🌼

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

🌹🌹🌹🌹🌈🌈🌈🌈🦋🦋🦋🦋🌸🌻🌷

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Have re- edited- You was meant to be I- lol...🌹

[lightsong]

Hahaaa my dear dear creative one, now You are reminding me with "I" and my mistakes lol

read moreHahaaa my dear dear creative one, now You are reminding me with "I" and my mistakes lol

Hugs my dear***

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

U and I are one in essence so much of a muchness the same🌹

[lightsong]

I surely agree! : ) ( :

[Lorry]

Well i'm guessing this is not about cake, which it would be if I had written it :)
For such a short piece, you do pack in a lot of flavour to your words :)

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

It’s all in the taste- the recipe needs to differ to add the spice to life- and no not having your cake and eating it- lol- 🌹

[jacob erin-cilberto]

just that little taste of sensuality can send us spinning through the night.
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

So right you are and where it ends we can only dare to find out- Thankyou for appreciation🌹

[sette]

passionate and endearing can be enough adjectives to describe your poem

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Without passion we are dead- Thankyou I appreciate🌹

[Papaya]

I little bite can certainly ignite.
:)

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

It certainly can ignite a fiery furnace- Thankyou for your time🌹

[DoormanDan]

Interesting little poem. I can mostly understand the meaning of it, but the first few lines of the poem make it hard to understand. I would suggest rewriting the first two lines, as they're a little clumsy. Other than that, you did a good job with this (especially considering it's such a fragmented piece. Writing an understandable and strong piece with so little words can be quite a challenge, but you proved that you could do it with this). Keep on writing. :)

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Confusion is clarity- Thankyou for your time I appreciate it- 🌹

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Have re- edited🌹

[DoormanDan]

I see. Was too tired to realize that was nothing more than a typo at the beginning XD. Anyway, now it's much, much better.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

I was too caught up in the moment and thoughts to realise the fault- Thankyou for your approval🌹