‘One Bite’

The sweetest taste of bliss🌹

‘One Bite’

If I had
You
Close tonight
It would
Take
Just one bite
And
All my
Emotions
Would have
Taken flight..

Kelly Fagelund-Gjersoe
17 April 2018

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

I looove it, Kelly!
When you so sweetly and warmly whet our appetites with just one sizzling little bite … and, you know what they say about bites, eh? "Betcha can't take just one!" ; )

Ummm, super picture, too … thanks for the lovely moment shared, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

So glad it dampened ur appetite-lol....joys of simplicity🌹

[Micah]

I like the enjambment you used in the poem. It gives the perfect feel. I also like the almost rhyme of "bite" and "fight", it ties together the ideas and makes the poem flow really well. The simplicity and easily understood vocabulary actually helps the poem in this case, where it might hurt other poems. It makes it easy for people to relate to and enjoy. I think the short length also is important, because if the poem continued on it wouldn't be as strong.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Yes - violence they say is the first sign of love- lol- love to hate- Thankyou for taking time and sharing your thoughts- much appreciated🌹

[Alexa Apothic Red]

The first taste and the floodgates open up, when longing for a far away love.. the appeal of the first taste or sight of them is so enticing... like get here now.. as close as skin and then you'll have everything! I completely relate!

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Is true what you say- reminds me of song- caravan of love- I would do anything- Thankyou for your words🌹

[Kalea Barger]

Lovely poem! The emotion that comes through in a piece that short is amazing. You are concise in your language, with diction that allows the mind to wander and each person to picture imagine themselves in that situation. The layout and breaks in each line give every word such importance, and the rhyming helped the feeling or romance and lust become even stronger.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou fir wonderful words I appreciate and Thankyou for stopping by🌹

[Patricia Wedel]

Just a nibble in time... when moonlight shines...

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Oh moonlight Devine...🌹

[Richard McLin]

Wow, short yet very emotional. Great piece from a great poet. Nice job.
-Richard

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou kindly- from one great one to an even better greater one..lol🌹

[Neville]

Tis but a sweet little tid bit to tempt those who have an appetite for words.......thanks for handing it to us all on a plate..... Neville

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

I thought a silver platter would do..you are most welcome- thanking you🌹

[Neville]

I am thus indulged........N

[emmajoy]

Hmnnn, very interesting. Must be two for the price of one time . But, watch out for harvest time, those - threshers can do untold damage. :) Sorry, this post conjurs up too many graphics for me, time for a cuppa but - definitely no cookies. A dleiciously fun write, Kelly!

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

What is a cuppa without the cookies- need dunking...it’s the first bite that’s the longest...🌹

[emmajoy]

Oh yes.. definitely. Mind you, some cookies are larger than the circumference of the cup/mug.. guess one could use a saucer! Gross!! xx

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Mmmmm now there are cookies and koekies...can’t have your cake and eat it....🌹

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Oh my wow, saucy love bite poem. Super poem in brevity. Thumbs up.


I'm quite a newbie here, Pleez do review, write your thoughts under my newest poem too. Luv making friends and am used to exchange of comments.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thanking you and yes I will I don’t always have time but I’ll try my best- Thankyou for your kind words I appreciate it🌹

[A. Kim Spradling]

Wow.... VERY sensual. Many emotions in this poem.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou for your time I’m glad you enjoyed it🌹