‘Breathless’

Suffocating souls of love🌹

‘Breathless’

My heartache it
Steals
I cannot breath

I feel it in my throat
I want to choke-

The love
It’s stuck
In the pit
Of my soul-
Where it endlessly
Grows
Afraid to show

Because of things
We just don’t know

‘How will it go?’
‘How will I know?’

My stomach knots
With every blood
Vessels it clots

Emotions suffocating
Excruciating
Floods of
Everwaiting
Everwanting
Everlasting love

Turning around and
Around-
Endless thoughts
Endless sounds-
Passion profound
Lifting
The soul
Off the ground

Burning desire
Igniting
The fire-
Consuming
Lifegiving oxygen
Gasping
For air
Where are you
Out there

Leaving me bare
Naked and exposed
The torment
It grows-

Your heart
It only
Knows

The love it will
Show
Like a firefly
It will
Glow-
Lighting the
Way
On that
Oh so special
Day

Two souls entertwined
Unique love
Of only one kind-
Lifegiving kisses
For the breath
That was missing

Completing
Two souls as
One -

The journey
Has just
Begun .

Kelly Fagelund - Gjersoe
9 March 2018

Reviews

[Thepensiveplayer]

Your poem certainly makes me visualize walking towards the woman I cherish in my life. Being unable to utter any words as the distance closes. Breathless as we may be from time to time our eyes tell the story. Nice work! Keep writing. :)

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

And isn’t that the most precious feeling talking out of the depths of your heart and connecting in spirit- I’m glad it stirred emotions for a special person in your life- Thankyou again for your time and kindness I appreciate it🌹

[tracey]

i really enjoyed this post you have some brilliant pieces i will be reading some more, thanks for my review as im new im gratefull for critiques, good or bad

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Your writing is amazing just love it you are very intouch with your inner being..you are welcome and yes I’d appreciate to know what you think- 🌹

[Adam Adams]

must consider this... one of my fav. poetry. eventually. had a great time with it. really liked the format u decorat ur words. quite mesmerising it is to be reading. the whole picture of this picturized love-vibes are well smooched at ur mystic work. very impressive. have at it! 🥂

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou I’m glad you enjoyed it - 🌹

[Sunwizz]

I felt this way when i met my husband. I love this poem so much.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou I am glad it brought back fond memories for you, Thankyou for your time🌹

[Wanaka]

This is a perfect love story. I remember when I felt this way with my husband when we first dated. He also kind of described what he was feeling the first time in the same way you did. I love seeing poems like this that make you remember a feeling or action that you've done in your life that was meaningful. I also like how you added in her actions of opening up to him. Keep up this beautiful work.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou for your kind words and appreciation- I’m glad it touched you- sometimes I look at my poems and wonder if they really do have impact but each and every word and emotion comes from the truth and depth of my soul- expressing the spirit and if it can touch someone’s heart and do good then my job is done- blessings🌹

[Wanaka]

I can't wait to read more :)

[KCthelastboyscout]

I miss feeling this way. Very passionate. I'm glad you shared this with us

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

My pleasure- dig deep and feel set yourself free🌹

[Coyote Poetry]

Old Johnnie saying. Anything easy isn't worthwhile. Worthwhile things need time and patience. A wonderful and hopeful poem dear Kelly.
Coyote

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Yes I know all good things come to those who wait through light and dark and hills and valleys but truth will always prevail , Thankyou 🌹

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Kelly.

[mou]

you have sketched all the colors of life with a poetic flow of how 'grey' changes to 'sweet red'..in life we experience all test of a dish sometime with a more salt or sometime with less sugar..but to hold a wonderful love,it's worth to bear all the storm..you have penned it with all your charming words and beautiful emotion..it's alluring
mou.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou and I’m glad it evokes feelings within you- important for us to feel , Thankyou for your time🌹

[.]

The full gamut of emotions described in relation to love in this piece. It is always ironic that Love can evoke such wonderful emotional peaks and troughs.

Words no doubt written with life experience, with wonderful flow and scatterings of rhyme throughout. Nicely conceived.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

If we cannot put experience into words we surely lack and miss out in lessons learnt- Thankyou for you time I appreciate it🌹

[Dave]

Kelly - you so elegantly describe the agony and at times the ecstasy of love.
After years of being its '"victim" and at others its happy recipient I've come to
believe that in order to truly appreciate love one has to experience the wide
range of feelings it can conjure.

Take care and thanks for the wonderful write. Dave

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Thankyou again for your kind words- yes so right u are but sometimes it drives u insane and if not expressed what will become of all that uncontrolled within you- the beauty of being in contact with the self- I appreciate your time- my pleasure always🌹take care 🌹