I like short sharp lines and they give that tumbling down feeling to the read, which works so well, especially when the theme is one of going downhill and needing to catch oneself and greet the brand new day, as a new start..a way to stop the tumbling down...we can only be there for people, can't fix them...they need their own hope to kick in.
really good piece with lots of feeling.
j.
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
You are so right, glad you enjoyed it, Thankyou for your time🌹
Hi Kelly, I enjoyed the read of this piece! The structure was particularly interesting. It gave the read a sense of urgency. You controlled the flow quit well here! Well done! Best Wishes!
I agree dear Kelly.
"When the time has
Come
Don’t turn and run-
Reach for the
Sun"
You are right. We need to run to and swim in the utopia of happiness. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Truth must always come first and we need to face it and learn when one is taught otherwise we lose o.. read moreTruth must always come first and we need to face it and learn when one is taught otherwise we lose out in many lessons...🌹