Sun shines through the river's blue

You, 
You speak in riddles when you speak in past tense, 
you walk parables and minstrels songs, 
as you wait, 
for the gardener at the gate. 

Sun shines through 
the river's blue, 
make boundless, flagrant hues, 
*you never knew.* 

The night is anything but slumber- 
Rain is anything but rain- 

The swelling of forces that are powerful and excessive, 
All is bent on living, 
all is fulfilled in  that living alone, 
reconciled in death.(perhaps).

Reviews

[thewholesoul]

A little elusive, definitely a personal exprience you are going through, nice free style and the meter gave the poem a sharp edge. "rain is anything but rain - " has to be my favourite line. best wishes

[Mary Bosworth]

It is clear that this piece was put together with care. The construction is full-bodied and each line expresses alot of meaning and emotion.

[Susan Beth Horvath]

Good writing and uncovering of experience and emotion.

[Blake Fodor]

The flow of the writing is very easy and smooth and it leaves the reader aware of the moment and in good spirit! Well done.

[Ashfallen]

I feel and soak in the mood of this piece with ease and eagerness. It leads me there, easily.
I read and re-read trying to make my mind follow the images and the meanings within and behind the words. And I stop short, unsure. Do I really detect the meaning I suspect? The wondering makes it all the more exciting, I dare say. Like a beautiful, sleepy, foggy tease.

The night is anything but slumber--
Rain is anything but rain--

[Lauriegirl]

This work is fascinating and exceedingly well-done

[Delmar Cooper]

Sounds epitaphic to my ear. Something scrolled in wrought iron over the grave yard gates.

[Deepwater]

great writing on this piece I really enjoyed it, maybe take the first YOU out but that your to think about

[Malister Mikey]

You have done a good job on this piece I really enjoyed it

[Anne Timmins]

I enjoyed this very much. But it is the way that you put this together that floats it. The use of imagery is lovely