Grey Waves
A Poem by
K Scott Smith
in my city in september in the early morning my wife lay on her side still, and still on the other side of the day i used to see love in the way her legs curled under her her mouth slightly open and a few wayward strands of hair (with thier own eco-structures, seemingly; i used to trace her body fingertip to tip, in varying wonder of the various perfections, her wrinkles, her pimples, her curves) allowed to linger over her face (this wasn't permitted, usually, when awake; her sighing arms and fingers an ever churning slipstream of brushing away and tying ups) i used to see love (yes, love) our window was open only a few inches and in the morning came, in grey waves
© 2014 K Scott Smith
Reviews
i liked the climax..................
Posted 10 Years Ago
this fantasy read takes a reader to another place and it is a wonderful journey! It makes the reader feel transcended
Posted 10 Years Ago
this fantasy read takes a reader to another place and it is a wonderful journey! It makes the reader feel transcended
Strong images and emotions flow gently through this piece like an autumn breeze chases away the warmth of summer. Its a gentle poem of change.
Posted 10 Years Ago
Strong images and emotions flow gently through this piece like an autumn breeze chases away the warmth of summer. Its a gentle poem of change.
Wow this packs a punch. It is raw and full of emotion. Great job
Posted 10 Years Ago
Wow this packs a punch. It is raw and full of emotion. Great job
I love this. It's honest, pure, true love.
Past tense makes it sad and intrigues questions.
Great piece.
Posted 10 Years Ago
I love this. It's honest, pure, true love.
Past tense makes it sad and intrigues questions.
Great piece.
Love this piece. Keep writing.
Posted 10 Years Ago
Love this piece. Keep writing.
writing from your heart and deepest soul is never useless. I loved this so much. great write
Posted 10 Years Ago
writing from your heart and deepest soul is never useless. I loved this so much. great write
you have captured the essence of women with this poem.... that we are creatures of habit and VANITY.. But to me one thing was painfully evident .. That you loved her intensely and completely and that you use the past tense though out. The love is very tangible in this poem. I could see it and taste it. :-) ..
Posted 10 Years Ago
you have captured the essence of women with this poem.... that we are creatures of habit and VANITY.. But to me one thing was painfully evident .. That you loved her intensely and completely and that you use the past tense though out. The love is very tangible in this poem. I could see it and taste it. :-) ..
I am very impressed. It is deep and I liked it a lot, Thank you for sharing
Posted 10 Years Ago
I am very impressed. It is deep and I liked it a lot, Thank you for sharing
Thank you for sharing and inviting me to read. Interesting. Of course I don't understand a word of it. Am I supposed to? Would you forgive me if I did? I wouldn't. I would take it as an infidelity. But that's just me.
Confidentially, just you and me talking here, there are times in the night I reach out and touch my wife. Time was I touched her intimately, you know what I mean. Now, I make sure there is a regular pulse, that the breathing is as it should be. Terrible to confess, now I check to make sure she is alive. Once I touched her to make sure I was alive.
Posted 10 Years Ago
Thank you for sharing and inviting me to read. Interesting. Of course I don't understand a word of it. Am I supposed to? Would you forgive me if I did? I wouldn't. I would take it as an infidelity. But that's just me.
Confidentially, just you and me talking here, there are times in the night I reach out and touch my wife. Time was I touched her intimately, you know what I mean. Now, I make sure there is a regular pulse, that the breathing is as it should be. Terrible to confess, now I check to make sure she is alive. Once I touched her to make sure I was alive.
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K Scott Smith Birmingham, AL
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K. Scott Smith is a writer from Birmingham AL. He writes poetry as well as Historical Fiction. He is a lover a Rimbaud, Bukowski, Blake, Neruda, Nietzche, and Mckinley Cooper(to name a few). Most rece..
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