A casual conversation of probably less than 4 minutes, but it "shook me to the core".
I knew a bloke who rarely spoke, A gentle kindly soul. Then one day his words did flow Through my heart they tore a hole. His soft voice told a story so hard It changed my perception of war. Another point of view from which I hadn't considered before.
He went to church his faith was strong But I never heard him preach. And how to help your fellow man So much that he could teach His home a refuge open wide If you need a place to dwell. We were all aware of his good deeds But I never knew him well.
The first communion of our sons Both were 10 years old. Proud parents gathering afterwards Was when his story told. This man so proud of his only son, He reflected way back when He was a child of that same age, Things were so different then.
We all had childhood heroes Mine were pilots of the sky. The “Dam Busters”, what a movie I watched those bombers fly. I applauded the Allied victories Like the thousand bomber raid. Reeking havoc on the enemy, A strategic impact made.
We were living in serenity The peace of a tropical isle. His memories overwhelming, The story began with a smile. He was born in nineteen thirty five, By the tender age of ten He had only ever known of war Daily bombings happening then.
He spoke of air raid warnings And in bunkers underground. The constant pounding of the earth So loud their screams were drowned. They lived in different places Each time a brand new start. The reason being their last house Had just been blown apart.
He spoke of grief and sadness And how his mother cried, Each time they learned an uncle, Or little cousin died. Occasionally he went to school And hung his bag up on the rack. Each time another empty hook A little child won't be back.
I was fighting back my tears by then My eyes beginning to swell, On learning that this gentle man Had risen out of hell. He played amid the ruin and rubble And occasional body piece. At ten he’d never considered That war would ever cease.
Sometimes he skipped the shelters To watch from a nearby hill. Exploding bombs and tracer bullets A horrid childhood thrill. He bore witness to the spectacle Of bombers going down. He watched the firestorm burn Cremating his whole town.
And my hero bomber pilots, How could they ever know That a little boy named Helmut Played in Dresden down below? His words cut deep into my soul They shook me to the core. Surely no one truly believes In victory from war.
A Story that I have wanted to tell for a long time. It thanks was to Baby Ricochet's brilliant write of "The London Blitz 12/29/1940" that finally inspired me to get of my arse and make it happen.
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Even in a just fight, innocent lives are affected. Yet humanity does achieve a temporary reprieve when evil is cut out. Like an unpleasant surgery to remove a tumor. Hard to take and the body suffers, but the life is preserved. I agree war is sickening for all parties.
A worthy write and reminds my eye of another poet from Aussi land, David Lewis Padget.
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so much for thoughtful review, yes the evil must be cut out, at least in WWII evil was eas.. read moreThank you so much for thoughtful review, yes the evil must be cut out, at least in WWII evil was easy to identify. I do feel most honoured that it might in some way remind you of David, I am a huge fan.
This is a powerful and entrancing poem. It kept me guessing as to how it would end all the way to your surprising mention of Dresden, a city that was bombed almost out of existence. Perfect rhyming throughout and generally good cadence. A few misplaced accents kept it from being perfect. One notable instance of splendid cadence was your choice of the word "cremating" (his whole town.) The accent on the second syllable is exactly what was needed for the line. By coincidence, I happened to have seen "Dam Busters" on television a month or so ago. An epic poem. Excellent writing. Richard
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11 Years Ago
Thank you Richard, your kind comments are much appreciated. As one very new to writing poetry I par.. read moreThank you Richard, your kind comments are much appreciated. As one very new to writing poetry I particularly appreciate the technical tip, but believe me I have only written a dozen and a half and they are all here. So I will take every scrap of advice and try my best to understand and apply in future work. Absolutely no training in my background, but I was privileged to get some guidance from David Lewis Paget a few months back. In the meantime reading your work is a great lesson in the sort of poetry I aspire to write.
I loved it, it was really well written. Us, kids, are innocent to all the wars that go on in this world but a lot of us pay the price for other people fighting. The story you wrote was amazing and really hit home and will hit home to anyone.
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11 Years Ago
Noodle, I am sure I keep responding here, but they seem to disappear. Thank you so much for that wo.. read moreNoodle, I am sure I keep responding here, but they seem to disappear. Thank you so much for that wonderful review (sure I have seen it before?) Take care sweeties what ever you are doing.
I anticipated the twist (that he was German) about two thirds through the poem, but the message is still a strong one. Unfortunately many of the victims in war (all wars) are innocent civilians, including children. A poignant write. Thanks for sharing. ~ Robert.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you for calling in Robert. Yes the innocent civilians rarely hit the headlines, although the .. read moreThank you for calling in Robert. Yes the innocent civilians rarely hit the headlines, although the horror of Syria this past week has caught world attention.
Very affecting story within your poetry Keith, gave me chills, this is what poetry is all about, sharing emotions from life, you've done that rather aptly with this one my friend....kudos.
Wow Keith, this is heartfelt and so thought provoking. So glad you got off your arse and wrote this lol.
Seriously though, I often watch documentaries on television about WW2 and the tragedies on all sides continually overwhelm me.
To hear this from a first source would bring tears to anyone's eyes.
Thank you for writing and sharing!
I have no idea what the rating thing means so have left it alone when I have commented!
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11 Years Ago
Thank you again, this was about 15 years ago and I had lost touch with Helmut. I caught up with him.. read moreThank you again, this was about 15 years ago and I had lost touch with Helmut. I caught up with him before releasing this and he didn't actually remember me, yet his words haunted me, writng this help clear the system. Our wives & kids were the best of mates back then. Actually most of my work is a tad more light hearted Aussie nonsence if you have time please read back a little further.
A story that gave me goosebumps. We never know the true stories behind the casualties of war, do we? What a wonderful character study of a man you obviously admire! Living through the terrors of war changes a person forever...whether that person is a soldier or a civilian. Helmut decided to share his memories with the right person. Beautifully written and with flawless rhyme once again. lydi**
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11 Years Ago
Thanks again Lydia, I am humbled by you thoughful review.
Inspiring poem so vividly and poetically scribed in detailed fashion, of a child's innocent view of war and then in maturing years the frank understanding of its horrid brutality !
Siegfried Sassoon and Wilfred Owen amongst many would duly concur !
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11 Years Ago
Thanks Tom, I will read some of their work, I am only vaguely aware of Sasoon. I appreciate you ca.. read moreThanks Tom, I will read some of their work, I am only vaguely aware of Sasoon. I appreciate you calling in and the kind review.
11 Years Ago
Famous anti-war poets Keith, of the highest calibre !
I grew up on a diet of Australian bush poetry. Now a business consultant, I spend far too much time on aeroplanes and in hotels, I use this time to write. I like to tell stories and have fun. If y.. more..