Flowers of Saturn

Titan

Guided through dreams

On her rocky shores

I soar towards the moon queen

A celestial, I adore

 

Titan your soft curves

Have a crystalline glow

You make my heart swerve

With the beauty you bestow

 

 Enceladus

Enceladus your melting petals

Reflect an icy hue

When your storm settles

It’s the prettiest blue

Magic effused my soul

On this cold harboured moon

Yet again my heart a flower stole

With her snow-kissed bloom

 

Phoebe

Phoebe, the way you sway

Makes your rhythm contrast

A glimpse of your intoxicating ways

Breaking reality into a vision of love unsurpassed

 

Your intoxicating flow

Makes me delve into the dark of space

Behind a mesmerizing afterglow 

I'll gravitate to you under Saturn's embrace

 

 

 

Reviews

[BlackPrince]

The poem is beautiful and feels like a breath of fresh air, in terms of the imagery (transporting one into another metaphysical dimension), the rhyme-scheme and stanza structure aiding the overall rhythm and flow and wonderful execution.

Well done!

[KeeD]

Beautiful review, looking forward to checking out your writing when I get home from work. I appreciate your kind words.

[Traci]

The style, the imagery, and beautiful words portrayed in this piece have made it another favorite.
Its nice to be back reading your thoughts, your ink....keep writing :)

[Papaya]

This is beautiful personification. A very enchanting piece.

[ms. barrie]

enchanting-ly beautiful ink that weaves a tapestry of wishful romanticism...the originality of imagery leaves an indelible impression upon dreamer’s heart. always a feast for senses to read your art. amazing work ~ x

[KeeD]

Thank you for the amazing review

[LazerRays]

Wow :D I am such a freely mythology nerd. And an astronomy geek. This was a perfect combination!!!
Saturn is the Titan of time and certainly time slowed as I watched this. As I was certainly astounded by this stunning poem. :) nice work.

God, I'm such a nerd lol

[LazerRays]

*Greek not freely haha. (even though Saturn is the roman version of Kronos)

[KeeD]

Haha this is a cute review, thanks!

[Chris Shaw]

Three of the moons of Saturn. This is beautifully written Kee. It's been a while since I read any of your work, so pleased I came across this one. Eloquent and so poetic in expression. A delight and I thank you.

Chris

[KeeD]

Thank you for your warm review. It's been a while since I've spoken to you my friend, hope all is well?

[Chris Shaw]

All OK here and I hope the same for you. :)

[Chris Shaw]

Have just had a second read of these wonderful lines of yours Kee. This is such a very beautiful poem and I just wanted to say hello. Not seen you around for a long time. Hope all is good with you.

Chris

[emmajoy]

Seems you've used knowledge of space to create love in its celestial glory. You have instinctive meter, using sounds as well as specifics. Some truly fine phrasing, 'I’ll sway as we kiss into the dark of space.. .. I gravitate to you under Saturn’s embrace.'

[KeeD]

Thank you for the lovely words, appreciate your review fondly

[emmajoy]

Your writing is more than fine.. will read more when i can, promise.

[Davidgeo]

I really like how you used some of the moons of Saturn as prompts for each stanza.

You forgot a few though... she has 62 in total. You should try and add a moon to this poem every once and while. It'd be a cool idea for a long and evolving piece of writing.

[KeeD]

Haha thanks for the review, someone knows their space! I would love to do that, it's a great idea, its just no one reads long poems on this site, I know I don't read something if it's too long. I hope to one day be good enough to publish a book of poems involving space and emotion, using metaphors from the universe to convey my thoughts to the readers.

[Davidgeo]

Who gives a s**t if no one reads it. A good idea is still a good idea regardless of the general short attention span and shallowness of this sites users.

I know a few writers here who would definitely read it if you wrote it.

[KeeD]

Awesome i'll give it a shot! Cheers mate.

[Davidgeo]

I truly look forward to it.

If you don't do it I might steal the idea for myself.

[lightsong]

Oh wow! what an imagination! what a creativity! my eyes were wide opened while reading this! You brought the ancient past here, my mind wandered in Gods and Goddess myths, and oh I LOVE those myths, can't help but be helplessly drowned in their alluring mysteriousness, to see You writing all of this but in a modern way is magnificent, it's like You are Saturn and Your woman is floating around You with her many personalities and talents, strong, fragile, passionate, tender... playful, giving, etc... my favorite piece I read from You till now, thank You for sharing it with all of us!

all the best for You, much Love*

[Ardra]

Very beautifully done ...:)
I enjoyed reading this wonderful creation...