Phantasmagoria

read the note for reviewers after, thanks!

They are plotting how to objectify

Under a sky of broken trust

Rumours begin to multiply 

Forming puddles of disgust

Corridors house the veil of deception

Authority looked the other way

Tangled in webs of sticky humiliation

Hoping for the end of day

The brochure portrayed a safe haven

Far from this adolescent war

One lost soul ain't worth saving

But a reputation is worth fighting for

Barricade the doors of freedom

Let the halls ring with screams

Pray to God for you might need him

Relinquish all your hopes and dreams

The barrel of the devil's tool

Weighs my soul with burden

the day I dreamt I shot up my school

Where my conscience lies uncertain

Author's Note

Phantasmagoria - a sequence of real or imaginary images like that seen in a dream.
A poem about hurt, bullying, torment and suffering. A reason to reach out and feed the pain by deflecting, reflecting and inflicting it on others. Not the way to go about any situation, your best bet is to talk to someone and reach out and start a conversation with people you trust or can build trust with.
If you are in crisis, reach out for help https://13reasonswhy.info/

Reviews

[Onlyme]

Soft approach with heartfelt tender sentiments. Of lost hope and for a better tomorrow. For particularly the younger folk. Who still have many years left on this planet called earth. I really enjoyed the softness and tenderness of the flow of this dark poem. It shows your soft heart, your tenderness and a true spirit of a loving decent human being. A journalist with a heart and soul. Now that is great. in this day and age. I mean that nice. Not nasty. As a modern journalist. are told what to say and do and report. Nowadays. not like olden times. You could say and do what you liked.

[KeeD]

I completely agree we with. Most of us journalist are mouthpieces, used and disposed like tools for the agenda of men who believe they sit on thrones, wearing a crown of thorns on a liars chair. Thank you for looking beyond that and seeing my heart even in a darker write, it means a lot to me. Looking forward to revisiting your page.

[Onlyme]

And I you also KeeD. kindred spirit. I think I have found in you.

[Traci]

It takes great courage to not only write such a powerful, realistic poem, but to share with others. I appreciate your honesty, always. You have touched the heart and soul in such a way that this piece will stay with me as I ponder how one's anger, pain, etc. can lead to such tragedy. Great job, Kee.

[April Blue]

I love this version of the song.. The poem is amazing.. .

[ms. barrie]

you’ve covered the topic at hand, with creative brilliance...the subject matter is oft’ swept under the carpet till it’s too late, left to grieve ...then finally look back & remember all the signs.

anyhow, this is quite a compelling, fantastic ink,
wrought with sensitivity.
thank you for your author’s note and for sharing. ~ x

[Crowley]

Very brave to put this one out there. The tone and rhyme scheme were perfectly matched to the subject matter and in this day and age, we write about what is happening as long as we do it out or love and the hope of understanding the madness. I believe you did that her. Great Job!

[Chris Shaw]

Powerful write. Last two lines 'the day I dreamt I shot up my school, Where my conscience lies uncertain', freaks me out. I have wondered over and over again, why anyone even if they are hurting, have been bullied or suffered torment, would want to inflict such devastation on so many others. I have a real problem with violence. It sickens me so much, that I can't watch a film or TV if I think it's going to appear. That says quite a bit about me, and I have no clue where that comes from. The very opposite of your subject matter. You are so creative. The image you have posted, quite creepy. The eyes are the windows of the soul and all I saw is torment and pain. Someone who doesn't show it on the outside but they are locked inside their own prison. Your choice of music, I know from Johnny Cash. I love it, but it is incredibly soulful and sad, full of pain. I am left thinking about the Columbine massacre and the misery. Your poem flows well, rhymes and I am a big fan anyway of your writing. I also read the author notes.

Chris

[KeeD]

Hi Chris, thank you for reviewing this poem of mine. I was scared to put it out there due to the subject matter it carries, I appreciate you having an open mind to it and truly understanding that I just want to show the conflict and maybe some sort of consequences that might lead a person to such a disgusting life altering decision. I love that you are such a caring, peaceful person and it truly shows in your personality even over the internet. Appreciate you taking the time to review this, I was afraid I wouldn't get a single review for it.

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Keegan, poems deserve to be read and responded to. We can not ignore things we don't understand. Unless you try to walk in another man's shoes how will you ever learn what makes him tick. Keep writing and I will keep reading.

Chris