Volatile upside down smile

I'm like some sort of homemade dynamite

with an aftertaste like burnt coffee at a diner

That kind of addictive not made by design

Burning down Cairo like it was a matter of time

You come seeking answers about skeletons

Like all your questions are somehow relevant

Having you build up walls

So I can take them down like some sort of cannonball 

My mouth gives my brain motion sickness

like two ghosts fighting over who's more alive

Maybe it's because i'm a slave to the heartache

And every breath I've taken since is a waste of my time

Author's Note

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

//You come seeking answers about skeletons
Like all your questions are somehow relevant
Having you build up walls
So I can take them down like some sort of cannonball // -- fav. stanza

...wow! brilliant use of unique, imagery of fury painted your ink splattered here,
on such a damn relate-able topic...that is a testament to your own amazing style.

thank you for the read :) -- barrie

[...]

This very honest writing. Lines are in perfect order. I can see you really work hard on it. Or you got great talent. I like it cause of lines and words hold very well together.

[KeeD]

Thank you so much for your review. I hardly work on my writings, their like blurts of my thought process at the time and that is why they come out amateurish. Looking forward to reading you when you make your new account with writings reflecting the true you as mentioned on your profile :)

[pia]

to me this poem is about a person with severe internal conflict resulting in anger which can be felt through the words you put together so elegantly yet in a powerful way.
'My mouth gives my brain motion sickness
like two ghosts fighting over who's more alive'
beautiful lines, extremely deep and powerful. you gave a wonderful imagery of pain and wrath that comes from deep within.
this was amazing.
im so glad i stumbled upon your writes. you write beautifully !!

[KeeD]

I like that you used the word wrath to describe the emotion of this piece, it is definitely an internal war I tried to paint with my words. Thank you so much Pia, appreciate your reviews a lot!

[AYVID N]

Some souls abound in restless energy. The outer world must match their inner, more beautiful one. They are impulsive and explosive but loving and giving. I feel I am reading about one such sensitive soul here.

My mouth gives my brain motion sickness
like two ghosts fighting over who's more alive

Loved the lines. Identified with them very much.

[KeeD]

Thank you, I definitely feel like those two lines are some of the best I've ever come up with, and i'm not very good at all this writing stuff so i'm proud of them haha.

[workscot]

Well buddy,your writing still seems to have a downward tilt but the beauty and strong use of metaphor are duely noted.Last stanza my favorite in particular "my mouth gives my brain motion sickness.Dead on for any writer! I've tried to use the sites friending device but with little success.Old guy with old computer,but yes I can be a friend in need at your command.Lets both keep on truckin

[KeeD]

If i'm being honest with myself and with all of you, I write to music, with a busy schedule and a manic life I can't afford to be as creative with ideas and stories as I would love to be. So when I hear a song or a tune that stirs something within me, I write. The song I linked here inspired this poem. Thank you Workscot and i'd be honored to call you friend.

[Mirror]

"You come seeking answers about skeletons..."
Brilliant.

[KeeD]

Thank you Mirror

[Traci]

Written with so much emotion and intensity. We are all slaves to heartache in some sense, yet we do keep moving forward no matter the consequences.

[KeeD]

Well said Traci, your soul could illuminate the darkest places. Thank you for the review

[FlatLineBeauty]

This one hits hard. Like you can really feel the emotion behind it. You keep going although you know it will be destructive. You're putting so much work in... only to be crushed in the end later.

xo FLB

[KeeD]

It's like you've traced the design of my life in the review. Thank you friend, for always getting my words.