Garden of the deceased

The rain poured today

The sun starts to mourn 

As I placed my wife into a field of stone

 

The flowers don't know

My tears help them grow

will they ever bloom once more?

 

Time runs thin

and will eventually win

when my heart gives in

They dig a hole nice and deep

Here my body they shall keep

Awaiting eternal sleep

 

My cycle of life has come to end

I miss my wife, my one true friend

Into your arms, I shall ascend 

from the garden of the deceased

Author's Note

Reviews

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very sad yet profound piece. A different view of death Kee. Thank for sharing this poem

[Lyn Anderson]

I like your style. It is clean and clear and dark. Stripped of pretense.

[KeeD]

Thank you KLGoode

[Eric Pudalov]

This is such a gorgeous (and very sad) piece, but extremely touching. I find it fascinating that you switched points-of-view in the fourth stanza to that of the person being buried (or at least that's how it sounds).

It also seems to end on a positive note, if I'm not mistaken; you reference the "cycle of tears," and then in saying that "even in death there is life," it sounds as though death is not the end. I believe that way as well. I hope that writing this poem was therapeutic for you!

[KeeD]

indeed it was Eric, thank you!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Kee, wow... you truly touched my heart with this write...

I felt the gentle wind blow... and tears warm the heart...

This is a sad and beautiful view of death...

Well expressed...heartfelt!~xoxo~

[KeeD]

thanks beautiful

[Eric Pudalov]

Sweet review, Robbie! It's enjoyable to read your reviews as well as your poetry, because they are so heartfelt and honest.

[Mel Lisa]

delicate and vulnerable feel I got from reading this. loved it. Although sad, it was written with such grace and care. good work!

[KeeD]

Thank you Melecia

[Rob Santana]

Fascinating piece of work brother. Life continues in the garden of deceased by pushing daisies.

[KeeD]

Thank you brother, indeed it does

[Tina Kline]

Impressive poem. Very beautiful yet deeply sad at the same time.
You did a fantastic job on this haunting tale.

[KeeD]

thank you so much Tina Kline

[Tina Kline]

You're very welcome.

[Echoes of Eros]

This was a beautifully haunting vision of the world of life and death. Each word seemed so perfectly connected to the next, flowing the feelings and fire of earth and ash. So though provoking. I also want to thank you for reviewing my recent story. It would not allow me to comment!

[KeeD]

Thank you so much Echoes of Eros

[Raymond Federle]

Almost like an ode...well done! :)

[KeeD]

Thank you so much Raymond Federle

[Sami Khalil]

Heartfelt , touching...Bravo..................

[KeeD]

Thank you so much Sami Khalil

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...............