Halley

I see it in your eyes the lies of a thousand moons

Orbiting this disguise that you resorted to

The wind it blew tonight whispers of sighting you

Reach out for my hand I am the satellite that watches over you

 

Halley understand I know your plans, I see the truth

This comet of a life takes you by the knife and cuts your fortitude 

Like a stellar collision of constellations in your head

Giving rise to dead horizons, fallen stars they bled

 

Beams of light bursting inside, you've lost control

You scream there's not enough time in space to save your soul

So I gather your pics, lay it down with sticks and rocket fuel

Blaze it all up I've had enough of you just shooting through

 

I see it in your smile the wicked child of the universe 

Watching us pass by generation at a time, immortal curse

Living in the sky just waiting to die, when will you burst 

The intentions in your eyes harboring secrets of the universe

 

 

 

Author's Note

I wrote this poem with the concept of a girl collapsing, giving up on life and watching as society rotates by ignoring her pleas for help, till she falls deeper into her hell. The entire piece has a double meaning where the author expresses that Halley's comet abandons him only to show itself again after he dies.

Reviews

[Frieda P]

'Wicked child of the universe'....just woah!

Beams of light bursting inside, you've lost control
You scream there's not enough time in space to save your soul
So I gather your pics, lay it down with sticks and rocket fuel
Blaze it all up I've had enough of you just shooting through

You've created a whole new universe here Kee, your pen paints brilliance my friend. x

[devon]

Every line of this was bathed in eloquent beauty. I loved this poem, and though it had a very morbid undertone and haunting idea behind it, the piece was stunning all the way through. My absolute favorite lines were: Like a stellar collision of constellations in your head/Giving rise to dead horizons, fallen stars they bled.

Again, you've done a fantastic job!

[Bluefire]

This is amazing, and the song fits it perfectly. It kind of reminds me of a song called "Black Rose" by Trapt.
Well done!

[Ruth]

Wonderful concept and enjoyed very much. Feels like you have created an entirely different universe and merged so many things, impressive hon x

[Carly]

Awesome, Keegan! I'm really impressed with this one. This is such a relatable idea for so many people. The last stanza is definitely my favorite.

[Ahena MK]

Wonderful concept... Really beautiful
Ahena

[costa siwale]

Fantastic imagery in this poem, you have a way with words, yes you do.

[Baby Ricochet]

Chicks and comets. What's the difference? Good one Keegan

[FlatLineBeauty]

I absolutely loved this. You are one of my many favorite writers on here. I love when you create something new. The way your mind works with your imagination just astounds me. This was amazing. You have not lost your touch my friend. Keep up the amazing work. xo Winter

[KeeD]

merci beaucoup d'amour

[CriticalxxAngel]

Wow I love the way you wrote this. The song and the pictures are truly amazing too. Most of all I think your wording was great and the way you used the constellation gave this a greater deeper meaning.

[KeeD]

merci beaucoup d'amour