Heroin

I am slowly sinking deep beneath

as the earth's crust it covers me

the waves they gently blanket me

as I float away beyond the trees

 

I see the lady in the lake

she wants me to come drown again

take me to a different place

where the sun still shines and the days don't end

 

I need a chance to escape 

from my whirlpool of tears

bring me the horizon friend

I need to disappear 

 

free falling into the core

I've had enough of not having more

I want to lay before the storm

so I can feel alive/dead again

 

I need a chance to escape

from my whirlpool of tears

bring me the injection friend

I want to numb the pain

 

Heroin

 

 

Author's Note

Say no to drugs, it has ruined countless families.

A little poets insight into what this poem means.
It's basically an addicts cry for the drug, you see how captivated and obsessed the addict is with the drug, he knows its deadly, he knows hes sinking and drowning but the idea of that elevated high, the feeling of being alive which is overrated because its actually the feeling of being close to dead. Don't let something alter the way you want to feel, be it a drug, a woman or man, alcohol. If you want to feel good, do something good and trust me you will feel good.

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is freaking amazing!... and the picture is Profound!
You have taken me to the deep crevice of addiction... I for one, am very impressed with the intensity of your write.

I will definitely be keeping tabs on your work.

Well penned!

[KeeD]

thank you -blush-

[Chris]

A good author's note.

The poem flows with a sense of lyrics left behind.

[KeeD]

Thank you Chris, I did feel like it was more on the lyrical tone as well when I wrote it, I did hum it a couple of times I admit. Appreciate you stopping by and reviewing my work, thank you for your support.

[Frieda P]

Tough read for me as my son is fighting this addiction, not too successfully either. You nailed it Kee, comfortably numb might be the answer short term, but in the interim, you're killing yourself and taking those that love you along with....

[KeeD]

I'm so sorry to hear about your son, My dad has been in a relationship with this seductive drug for 20years, hes clean now for a whole two years but the damage is done already in so many ways. I just wish you strength in dealing with your son and this problem, I know it's hard and you have to be supportive, not easy at all being around that situation.

[Akira Kodama]

I'd like to address your message in the "note for reviewers." I find it quite a general - and somewhat ridiculous - statement. There are quite a few drugs that have little potential to destroy lives and/or families. Heroin of course has huge potential for that, but that does not mean all other drugs do as well. I know many people, including myself, who have used many psychedelics and other sorts of hallucinogens and it has changed their life for the better. I find it frees the mind each and every time. You have new experiences, new thoughts, and are open to things you may have never even thought of before.

Now for the writing itself: I found it very well-written. As much as I find this following statement overused, it "flowed well." You also didn't use hilarious slang like "shooting up." It was a very serious piece and I respect it. I also found it to have little radical bias against heroin use. Of course there was in the note, but in the piece itself it seemed to lack that, and leave the interpretation up to the reader. Very good.

[KeeD]

I believe that recreational drugs are either considered gateway drugs or not drugs at all, and I may be clinically/scientifically incorrect in that assumption but it is based on my opinion. I was aiming at the deal breaking drugs, the ones that put the world to darkness as the lantern's of loved ones grows dim..dimmer..then fades away till there's nothing left but the addiction and when you cannot fuel the addiction you either find a way too or perish away. Classic Example, My Father, Gem of a person off the stuff, totally con artist on it. No love lost.
On the Note of the poem ; Thank you for the kind, informative review. I can learn and improve with such reviews and with that I appreciate your time and understanding of my work. Much respect - CM

[Bluefire]

This is much like the drug itself,
It takes you away from the world and on a frightening yet beautiful journey into the high.
It brought me peace and also took my mind for a spin.
Well done! ^^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you escape one world and get mired in another that is only a temporary fix...and soon you need escape from that world...

nice reflection on what drugs can do to an individual...they are never the answer.

nicely done.