The End / of /The Beginning

This poem can be read from top to bottom or bottom to top both telling the story from different perspectives.

God never showed his face

as the world crumbled into space

the angels all blinked their eyes

Brightest light in the sky

Rolled by the dice of fate

the sun begins to annihilate

I can hear you cry

Restless Sky

Complete catastrophe 

The darkness has taken over

Sayonara humanity 

Say your goodbyes

Drowning heart, sinking kill

That little girl consumed by the chill

nature falling over the crowd

Cries for help yelled out loud  

Helter skelter everywhere

panic in the air

nerves wearing thin 

Survival mode kicking in

Ice cracked, water over flowing

the ground gave way

my entire world exploding

On that fateful day 

Day quickly turned to night

It was a beautiful sight 

I watched a little girl skate

On February the 28th

Author's Note

Nothing against God or religion in this poem. The poem is just a subject of my imagination.

Reviews

[Shivam Murari]

I can just feel the ironies and the captivity of this poem. It is a blunt write and I love such writes because it is always more appealing and thought provoking. I love how you took a step ahead of scientists and said that world is crumbled into space. Truly your best work I have read so far. Shelved into my library!

[CriticalxxAngel]

This is very deep and has many great views on things. The poem can be interpreted in so many different ways it's fascinating, Great Job

[KeeD]

Thank you :)

[Baby Ricochet]

I read it in both directions four times. I like it in reverse. Awesome

[KeeD]

Thank you :) I like it in reverse better too :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Wow, this was incredible in terms of imagery and flow. You have captured so many different colors, emotions, sensory elements, I scarcely know what to choose as my favorite part of this piece.

The end was a nice twist, and I quite liked the way that you brought things back from the sky to the earth. It's a cool metaphor in a lot of ways...we look to the sky, the magnificent beauty of what is above and then we are reminded of the beauty that is below as well.

[KeeD]

Thank you :D

[Spoon]

This is an incredible write! I have said before that you have talent and this just further confirmation. I don't know poetry that well but it seems like this would be hard to do. You use grand, yet sparse imagery with powerful effect.

I loved it.

[KeeD]

thank you so much

[Frieda P]

Deeply profound and emphatically desolate read, good flow all the way through, this crescendos into a bleak sight. Took my breath away to think of it and you brought it to light on the page Kee, kudos my friend.

[KeeD]

Thank you angel :)

[MandaBear]

This is very good. I enjoyed reading a interesting perspective. I just have one question though in the first stanza was "blnked" supposed to be "blinked, or blocked"? I was just wondering! Other than that it was enjoyable to read!

[KeeD]

Thanks, yeah it's supposed to be blinked stupid typo thank you

[MandaBear]

Your welcome =) Still a great poem even with the typo lol

[KeeD]

thank you :D

[JulieÉmile]

This is very good. The flow is just perfect and the way you have built it up as one reads further is very good. The last stanza is sort of an anti-climax to the earlier ones and that makes this poem all the more splendid. You have indeed used the element of anti-climax quite well. I have enjoy this a lot and also learned a lot.

Also, reading it from the bottom to the top creates even more of an impact. One cannot help but admire the sheer ingenuity with which you have constructed this masterpieces. Excellent job. Thank you very much for sharing this.

[KeeD]

thank you for the amazing review, looking forward to reading your work