The End / of /The Beginning

This poem can be read from top to bottom or bottom to top both telling the story from different perspectives.

God never showed his face

as the world crumbled into space

the angels all blinked their eyes

Brightest light in the sky

Rolled by the dice of fate

the sun begins to annihilate

I can hear you cry

Restless Sky

Complete catastrophe 

The darkness has taken over

Sayonara humanity 

Say your goodbyes

Drowning heart, sinking kill

That little girl consumed by the chill

nature falling over the crowd

Cries for help yelled out loud  

Helter skelter everywhere

panic in the air

nerves wearing thin 

Survival mode kicking in

Ice cracked, water over flowing

the ground gave way

my entire world exploding

On that fateful day 

Day quickly turned to night

It was a beautiful sight 

I watched a little girl skate

On February the 28th

Author's Note

Nothing against God or religion in this poem. The poem is just a subject of my imagination.

Reviews

[Shivam Murari]

I can just feel the ironies and the captivity of this poem. It is a blunt write and I love such writes because it is always more appealing and thought provoking. I love how you took a step ahead of scientists and said that world is crumbled into space. Truly your best work I have read so far. Shelved into my library!

[BlueDreams]

What an imagery !! Nature has shown its catastrophic behavior !!
No words :)

[KeeD]

thank you :D

[BlueDreams]

My pleasure :)

[s y e]

This is so creative!!! Wow, never would have thought of that. Smart.

I loved it, the structure and wording. I loveeeed the imagery, well done.

[KeeD]

Thank you honeybunch

[s y e]

No problemoo ;-)

[beyondpen]

Firstly... bravely creative! The idea of reading it top down and bottom up itself is commendable...
Secondly when i did get to finally pick up my jaw recovering from my state of awe at the style of poetry, it dropped again once i finished reading the poem for the story of apocalypse it tells ... both ways.
I personally found the bottom up one less scarier coz it still bears a similarity (although faint) to the present world in the day being more sought after than night (well by most people ) ... but man! the idea that there will eventually be a time when nights will be less harsher (and i say less harsher for a reason) than days.. is downright eerie!

[KeeD]

Thank you :D

[Astro]

Bold endeavors often bring interesting perspectives. This section,
"Drowning heart, sinking kill
That little girl consumed by the chill
nature falling over the crowd
Cries for help yelled out loud"
is for me the strongest part of your poem, because as you come upon it in reverse it hammers you with imagery.

[KeeD]

Haha thank you sir for this amazing review. .looking forward to reading your work

[Astro]

You're welcome, it's always nice to come upon an interesting and thought provoking read. Feel free to read mine anytime.

[Muse]

I guess watching the beauty of innocence can be like witnessing the big bang theory come to life.

[KeeD]

haha :D i knew if you read it you'd figure out one of the perspectives i was trying to portray in this. Most people read it as the end and the beginning.. there's more to it. Thanks for your review always appreciated!

[Muse]

I hope I wasn't too far off track? This was really abstract for you.

[KeeD]

Yeah just trying my hand at new styles of poetry.. I've never attempted something that can be read in different ways.. I've always tried to tell poetic stories with twists or secret messages but here I attempted to play with script as well.

[KeeD]

you hit the nail on the head :)

[Muse]

yeah me! lol

it's good to break out of your shell. :))

[icelandicblue]

I felt like there were two perspectives in your poem. I liked the way the images flew back and forth. This was a very different pom and I liked it a lot.

[KeeD]

thank you :D

[MOON]

Pretty unique write deep and thought provoking.

[KeeD]

thank you good to hear from you after a long time :D

[Kelsey]

I find it both interesting and impressive that this can be read two ways. I never thought to try anything like that. The flow of this poem is quite nice and easy to read. I think you did a great job with this, I really enjoyed reading it. x

[KeeD]

Thank you Kelsey :)

[Keith LaFountaine]

Excellent piece. I love the style of your poem; how it can be read top to bottom and bottom to top. Very few writers attempt such a thing and I commend you greatly for doing so (and doing so well might I add). Great job!

[KeeD]

Thank you sir!

[N!LoC]

a great vast imagination u have :-)

[KeeD]

Thanks bro