The End / of /The Beginning

This poem can be read from top to bottom or bottom to top both telling the story from different perspectives.

God never showed his face

as the world crumbled into space

the angels all blinked their eyes

Brightest light in the sky

Rolled by the dice of fate

the sun begins to annihilate

I can hear you cry

Restless Sky

Complete catastrophe 

The darkness has taken over

Sayonara humanity 

Say your goodbyes

Drowning heart, sinking kill

That little girl consumed by the chill

nature falling over the crowd

Cries for help yelled out loud  

Helter skelter everywhere

panic in the air

nerves wearing thin 

Survival mode kicking in

Ice cracked, water over flowing

the ground gave way

my entire world exploding

On that fateful day 

Day quickly turned to night

It was a beautiful sight 

I watched a little girl skate

On February the 28th

Author's Note

Nothing against God or religion in this poem. The poem is just a subject of my imagination.

Reviews

[Shivam Murari]

I can just feel the ironies and the captivity of this poem. It is a blunt write and I love such writes because it is always more appealing and thought provoking. I love how you took a step ahead of scientists and said that world is crumbled into space. Truly your best work I have read so far. Shelved into my library!

[SyberRose]

Very creative poem...Caradoc directed me here as you inspired him to write ONLY ONCE IN A THOUSAND LIFETIMES.
I enjoyed reading from bottom to top and top to bottom...I end up sometimes having my first stanza be the last stanza a lot or shuffle them all around...nicely done...Rose:)

[Traci]

Brilliant my friend! You never cease to amaze me with your creativity, and I applaud you on your new writing style, very admirable! This poem is very deep, thought provoking, which I always enjoy from you. I enjoyed reading this both ways, I personally liked bottom to top, both ways the fourth stanza's imagery stands out, each time causing me to stop reading for a moment, and just reflect upon the intensity of your words. Very well done, Kee.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, that is amazing what you did here...i liked reading it from the bottom up better.

but yes, we will all face this someday...we will all fall through the ice...we have thinned it so much now...we have created our own monsters who will eat us up in the end...

and God in his disgust will not want to show his face.

[chandlerl]

I got chills reading it top to bottom and the other way around. All the other reviews have already said it, but this is a very original piece. You took a lead and went with it and it panned out very well. A nicely won victory with this beautiful piece of poetry.

[KeeD]

It's really nice hearing from you after so long, thank you for such a positive review.

[chandlerl]

It was my pleasure. =)
And yeah, it's been awhile, I have somewhere around 200 read requests, so I thought I'd start with someone who's poetry I already know I like.

[KeeD]

You're to kind Lady Chandlerl, It is not the thought that you read my poems that set this smile upon my face though, it's merely that I've reconnected with a long lost friend. It's glad to have you words back to light up my boring days.

[chandlerl]

You can drop the l. ha. It's just Chandler.
It is very nice to read someone who can put their setences together so elegantly. =)
...that sounded like I meant me, but I meant you.

[Caradoc]

The idea behind this piece is so unique. I just might have to try doing something similar. One thing I did notice is that the story made a lot more sense when I read it bottom to top. That could just be me though.

All in all I was very impressed with this piece.

-Caradoc

[VeCeWallace]

A great and imaginative one! I saw, I visualized everything. That's amazing, man!

[Shay]

truely amazing, i loved it and thanks for sharing

[minnie:)]

This was really good. Somewhat sad and apocalyptic, perfect imagery in the poem and it also had a good beat. :)
~Minnie

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Interesting.... Very apocalyptic, which I assume is what you meant for it to be. Is the last line a flashback from before the End? How do you survive to tell the tale? Just out of curiousity:) Great work once again Keegan:)

[KeeD]

Read it from bottom to up... when you read it from top to bottom it gives the message that even in tragedy there is simplicity and beauty

[KeeD]

He narrates the poem and his last words have nothing to do with the catastrophe and devastation that's prevailing..its just him remembering the last beautiful human experience he enjoyed

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

I think it's really cool how you could read it either way, from top to bottom or from bottom to top, and it still makes sense:) I don't think I've come across that before:) Though I have to be honest, with the way my mind processes information, it makes more sense to me from the bottom up:) Anyway, great job:)