It flowed so well, I got lost in it :) Such a beautiful, emotional, lovely piece of writing, and the story was told wonderfully :D
Posted 11 Years Ago
Kee, this is so beautiful, it brought a little tear to my eye, lol, for I'm a sensitive one :P what an enchanting piece of just a family feeling, you bring this so well over, the missing, the love, the yearning, the feel, the culture... I'm in love with this piece. ♥ Remembers me also of the book "The Kite Runner" from "Khaled Hosseini" I'm a huge fan of his perfect literature. Also in that book nothing is in Morocco, it has many simularities, for the same, perfectness of purity you spelled out here. It's a huge pleasure to read your works my friend.
This was great Kee. Really well written, lovely story told.
"Let your worries hang for another day
Surf those waves in the Mediterranean bay" ~~ A gorgeous image, Kee. This is a lovely, touching bed time story, you've written it really well.
~ Noodle
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thanks bunches noodle ;3 looking forward to be the best dad I can be someday.
I love it. It seems like your writing flows so naturally. Nothing sounds forced or out of place. Your words come together beautifully like pieces of a puzzle, however I never know what to expect, and there are moments of intrigue. Great!!!
Beautiful poem man; I went to Morocco reading this. And about this line "Have your first beer to beat the scorching heat"; this never really happens with Indian dads, does it? :D
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Haha wouldn't know never had much of a dad. But I guess if its not a beer it's share your first pay .. read moreHaha wouldn't know never had much of a dad. But I guess if its not a beer it's share your first pay cheque :D
11 Years Ago
oh! I am really sorry.
yup, sharing the first pay cheque it is :P
Absolutely wonderful. I wish I could visit this place. Sounds relaxing and so peaceful, especially to a college student, such as myself, who does nothing but study and read. Wonderful write. Great job.
Traveling is something i'd love to do all my life.. no matter what..no matter where.. I want to see .. read moreTraveling is something i'd love to do all my life.. no matter what..no matter where.. I want to see it and write about it :)
11 Years Ago
Sounds awesome. I wish I could travel overseas. The whole money thing. Someday I will. :) And you wi.. read moreSounds awesome. I wish I could travel overseas. The whole money thing. Someday I will. :) And you will. Travel I mean. Good luck!
11 Years Ago
Yeah money is the only thing holding me back too, I hope to see better days so I better people can s.. read moreYeah money is the only thing holding me back too, I hope to see better days so I better people can see me in different places :)
Awwwwwwww, so sweet and so sad:( I wish that I could find a place that peaceful... even if it was only in my mind... but my mind belongs to the chaos.... Anyway, beautiful work Keegan:)
Hey I'm Kee, I'm 32 and work as a journalist in Mumbai, India. I dabble in writing poetry and do it purely to pump out the creative juices in my being. Thank you for stopping by, live, laugh and love .. more..