Arch Angel Gabriel's, "Lucifer"

Turn your volume to a mellow low and enjoy the background music for this poem~ purely fictional.

Kneel before thee brother 

Ridicule intent of our father?

Fallen wings of fiery dust

Walk the earth from dawn till dusk

Recidivist rise you must

Dreams of paradise shall combust

 

Wings subtracted along with divinity 

Detestable mortal manifestation 

Flame that once burnt an angelic glow

Now devises demonic fumes

Camouflage amongst innocent souls

Forging an army to accomplish goals

 

Will seek refuge in sanctified place 

Never revealing veracious face

Serpents tongue as it twists and twirls

Creating rifts between father and his world

Deceptive illusionist making believe 

What the eyes and the mind desire to see

 

The children of father, brothers and sisters of ours

Mortal they may be but the soul divine

Implanted in them is a piece of his heart

Trust in these words and you  shall never tear humanity apart

When trumpets are summoned

You acquire your seven

 

We shall set forth down from heaven

Putting an end to your future betrayal

Michael and I shall lead at the start as

Raphael, Uriel, Raguel, Selaphine and Jehudiel 

Implant tridents and psalms that pierce your heart 

Brother approbate the mortals as tantamount counterparts  

 

Eye to eye with the gale of the storm

Seeking all means to end this cold war

Power and dominance that's all you will seek

The purity inside you will start to grow weak

Lucifer awaken from deepened sleep 

A vision perhaps, a nightmare brother?

 

Acknowledge the mortals and love one another

For the wings are in place

Heaven is yet calm

Don't refuse fathers love fear awakening the swarm

Fallen angels will rise alongside you as they sing

Oh Lucifer, Our Father, Satan my king.

Author's Note

The poem tells a story of Gabriel having a vision of Lucifer's rebellion and warning his brother before it's too late.

Reviews

[FlatLineBeauty]

Kee this was amazing! I was hanging on to every line and the music fit perfectly. You never cease to amaze me. xo Winter

[KeeD]

miss ya' ty for the awesome review

[KeeD]

What a beautiful heavily weighted poem, full of passion, compassion, and (still a lot of truth), for you describe the differences of religion, and views here compared to Lucifer very good. I danced on the piano, because there you have chosen a beautiful piece, for I am touched by that piece, and love it by years... You expire deeper with words and rhythm, than many I read here.
Although it is a fictional poem, I taste a lot of your rich personality through it...
This in all positive matter, for I adore your style, and passion for "really saying something" with what you write, and knowing about what you write. Well well done, can't say how happy I am to read you again!

- Elisa

[KeeD]

Thank you so much for the kind review, I'm not very much into religion as a whole, I do believe in God though, as for this I just like story telling through my own mind in my own way.. and I wondered how it would be if the story was told differently.. if Gabriel had approached Lucifer before the event and warned him of a vision. I know I would speak with my sister if I thought she might be in trouble before it occurred. Thank you so much i'm so happy to have you read me again. You're amazing.

I like you for that, for we are the same, but it doesn't mean we don't know.... we don't read, we don't feel. :) glad you open up to this. You're amazing too! thank you for making me review as good as I need! x

[Acucena G.]

Its a fantastic poem , keep it up D'Souza

[MandaBear]

beyond beautiful.

[TurtleClark]

this is amazing.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is the epitome of a "story" poem. I settled in with a nice cup of tea and read this with great interest. I absolutely love all of the imagery that you used, and your phrasing was extraordinary. I like the way that you cast your own light on the war of angels and the creation of Lucifer. What makes this unique is the way that shed your own light on something that is highly controversial in a lot of ways. Well done.

[KeeD]

Oh wow thank you for such an awesome review :O, I consider myself a storyteller more than a poet, but poetry is the only means I plan to tell my stories, haha.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I love story poems...nice change from the metaphysical.

[Marie]

An excellent story; is it based on a myth? I know something about the war between the angels...lucifer's fall... (though there is some contradiction in the Bible about that).

[KeeD]

It's based on some of the scriptures of the biblical story of the first angelic war. This is just my own rendition of it though, an idea I had whiles having a cup of coffee and came across the name Gabriel in the newspaper.

[KeeD]

thank you for your kind review Marie :)

[Ohhhwillow]

This is pretty cool, love that you have experimented with mythological context and that this has a sort of shakesphereian feel to it's style! Lovely piece

[Saichiro Wolftotem]

Your music choices that accompany your works lately have been really spot on. I like the vivid imagery in this, but I couldn't really get completely into the meter. May just be me though.

[KeeD]

I don't write specific to any meter i'll be honest.. I write poetry to just express stories in my head >< I don't do it professionally or haven't been trained

[chaotic katie]

once again very well written and the music added a nice touch. fantastic job!